题目内容
【题目】【来源】北京市海淀区2017届高三3月零模
假如你是红星中学高三一班的学生。3月5日是学雷锋日,你班组织了一次帮扶活动。请根据下面四幅图所提供的活动内容和过程写一篇英文短文,为你校校刊英语专栏投稿,不少于60个词。开头已给出。
提示词:senior citizens home养老院
Our class planned to organize an activity on March 5th,the day in memory of Lei Feng.
【答案】Our class planned to organize an activity on March 5th, the day in memory of Lei Feng. It turned out to be a memorable and rewarding experience.
The day before, we had had a class meeting to discuss what we would do, where we communicated openly and shared our own thoughts with each other. After a heated discussion, we made up our mind to go to a senior citizens home to do something for the elderly. On March 5th, we set out early in the morning. As soon as we got to the senior citizens home, we did a thorough cleaning. Some were sweeping and mopping the floor, while others were cleaning the windows. The rest did some washing. An hour later, the rooms in the senior citizens home took on a new look. And then we were divided into two groups. One group shared the joy with the elderly by presenting an impressive performance, which won wave-like applause and cheers. The other group taught those who were interested in English some daily English expressions. In the course of learning, we were much inspired by their longing for knowledge. Time passed unconsciously. When lunch time came we had to wave good-bye to them.
Exhausted as we were, our effort eventually paid off and I took pride in ourselves for doing something beneficial. Had we not engaged in this activity, everyone in my class shouldn’t have taken a hard-won opportunity to understand the inner joy of helping others.
【解析】本篇书面表达是一篇关于帮扶活动的图画作文。短文一共包括四幅图画。根据写作内容及要求,考生应注意使用第一人称。在叙述要点时,应使用一般过去时和过去完成时;要注意文章的层次,结构要清晰;生动详细地描述出图画内容,交代清楚时间、地点、人物以及事件。写作时一定要注意故事的连贯性与完整性
【范文亮点】
1. 范文采取了状语从句(As soon as we got to the senior citizens home, we did a thorough cleaning..);宾语从句(The day before, we had had a class meeting to discuss what we would do, where we communicated openly and shared our own thoughts with each other )和非限定性定语从句(One group shared the joy with the elderly by presenting an impressive performance, which won wave-like applause and cheers)等句式。
2. 文章采用了thorough;impressive;wave-like;be engaged in等高级单词或短语。