Question

【题目】第五部分：书面表达（满分 25 分）

请阅读下面短文,并按照要求用英语写一篇 150 词左右的文章。

In the past, the expression "children should be seen and not heard" summed up the attitude of parents to heir children. Children were expected to be disciplined, well-behaved and the parents ruled the home. But today parents seem to do everything for their children and control all aspects of their lives. Some call this overparenting. Parents take charge of everything: from what pre-school their kids attend to the pastimes they take up. Parents feel they must protect their children to increase their chances for success. As a result children do less than ever before.

There are two reasons for overparenting. First, people now have fewer children than in years past so they can give each one more attention. Secondly, parents feel the future of their family is now dependent on only one child, so they must do as much as possible to help their child succeed.

But overparenting has negative consequences. Children are less independent now and are protected from the hardships and failures that teach them determination and give them the satisfaction of accomplishment. Also the pressure kids feel to be successful means they experience more anxiety and depression than ever before.

〔写作内容〕

1.以约30个词概括这段短文的内容；

2.然后以约120个词表达你对“父母过度照顾子女”这一现象的观点。内容包括：

(1)以你自己或他人成长的某次经历，说明父母过度照顾对子女的影响；

(2)表达你在此方面对父母的希望或建议。

［写作要求］

1.在作文中可使用自己的亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

［评分标准］ 概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

Answer 1

【答案】

Because parents are having fewer children, they increasingly feel the need to control the lives of those children. As a result, many children are becoming less independent, determined and ambitious than in the past.

Parents today discourage their children from doing housework, extracurricular activities and socializing because they fear it will interrupt their education. For example, when I was younger I wanted to learn the guitar but my parent wouldn’t allow me because they believed it would distract me from my studies. They are happy as long as I perform well in my exams but they don’t seem concerned about how I develop as a person.

To some extend, I understand parents’ concerns, but I think they should love their children for who they are, not what they want them to be. We deserve the chance to chase our own dreams and learn on our own. Even if we fail, we can learn from those failures.

【解析】

试题分析：写作时要考虑以下几个方面：（1）层次结构，（2）句子的时态（3）内容要点。尤其是内容要点要把握准确到位，要点需要考生拿捏准确以及正确，因为只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。又要包括所有的要点，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。

【亮点说明】本篇作文层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合作文要求，句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。文中使用连接词和插入语，如To some extend, For example, As a result等， 使文章语言流畅自然，为文章增色，而且还使用了一些高级词汇及句型。