题目内容
【题目】假如你是李明,你跟你的e-pal Paul聊天,他表示学习压力很大,请你给他发封电子邮件,安慰他并给他提一些建议。
【写作内容】
将自己的问题告诉老师和同学,请求得到他们的帮助。
不要总想着考试成绩,要多想想自己在哪些方面进步了,这样会更自信。
多做运动,运动可以帮助自己缓解压力,并且有助于睡眠。
你对他的祝福。
注意:1.词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
Dear Paul,
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Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
【答案】
Dear Paul,
I quite sympathize with you and understand the great trouble you are suffering from. I suggest you communicate your trouble to your teachers and classmates so as to get help from them. You are not supposed to think about your exams all the time, which only makes you more stressed out. Instead, you should think about the progress you have made in your study, which will surely increase your own confidence. In addition, I advise you to do more exercise in your spare time to relieve your stress, because sports will also help you sleep better at night.
I hope you will get out of your trouble sooner and live happily.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
【解析】
试题分析:本文属于提纲类短文,用来安慰别人并提出一些建议,使用一般现在时。注意一下几点:一、文章的要点都已经给了出来:1.将自己的问题告诉老师和同学,请求得到他们的帮助。2.不要总想着考试成绩,要多想想自己在哪些方面进步了,这样会更自信。3.多做运动,运动可以帮助自己缓解压力,并且有助于睡眠。4.你对他的祝福。二、要准确表达,写作时注意准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系。三、尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次,特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。
【亮点说明】文章语气恰当,既表现出了自己的关心,又恰当的做出了安慰。无低级错误,文笔流畅。本句中使用了较为高级的词汇以及短语,如sympathize同情,communicate交流,suffer from遭受,so as to为了;还有较多的高级句式,如Instead, you should think about the progress you have made in your study, which will surely increase your own confidence.中的which指代前面的一句话的内容,在句中做主语,是非限制性定语从句;because sports will also help you sleep better at night是原因状语从句。连接词Instead,In addition的使用也使文章更加流畅。