Question

到现在，你遇到过许多老师：每一位老师都是与众不同的。在你心中：理想的老师是什么样的？请以“My Ideal (理想的) Teacher”为题目谈一谈你的看法，考虑下列要求：
1. 教师的年龄和性格特征；
2. 课堂上（教学风格）；
3. 学校外（和睦相处）；
4. 家庭作业（多与少）；
提示： 1. 字数：100词左右；文章开头已经给出，不计入总字数；     
2. 可适当增加细节，使行文连贯；
3. 参考词汇： 风格style；   负担burden
My Ideal (理想的) Teacher
I have met many teachers up to now, and every teacher is different. However, my ideal teacher should have the following characters:
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Answer 1

My Ideal (理想的) Teacher
I have met many teachers up to now, and every teacher is different. However, my ideal teacher should have the following characters:
Firstly, she/he maybe young or old, but the most important thing is she/he should be energetic and enjoy teaching. Then, she/he should be open-minded, easy-going, warm-hearted and self-confident(a sense of humor etc.). Next, in class he/she can make her/his class interesting and students understand his ideas deeply and easily. He is good at using teaching methods to challenge students or to encourage students to study further. After that, she/he can get on well with students and share the happiness and sorrow with students after class. At last, because the ideal teacher’s homework is not too much, students’ burden can be lessened completely, all the students are looking forward to attending to her/his class.(109 words)

试题分析：题目要是以“My Ideal (理想的) Teacher”为题，谈谈你对理想老师的看法。写作要点已经给出，可以从老师的年龄和性格特征、教学风格、亲和力、布置作业情况等方面着手进行写作。注意单词拼写和标点符号的正确使用，尽可能多使用一些定语从句、倒装、宾语从句等语法知识；使用第一人称进行写作。
亮点说明：范文注意使用Firstly, Then, Next, After that, At last来表示列举，使作文显得条理清晰、层次分明；
范文使用了表语从句the most important thing is she/he should be energetic and enjoy teaching；make后跟宾补make her/his class interesting；
范文使用了较多的短语和固定搭配：is good at，encourage students to study further，get on well with，share the happiness and sorrow with students，looking forward to，attending to等，使作文内容比较充实。