Question

某地要新建一所图书馆，现在设计师Dr huang正在向全体市民征求意见，请你以残疾人的角度为图书馆的设计提供一些意见。
要点：
1. 出入口的设计要符合轮椅出入；2. 电梯的设计；3. 洗手间的设计。
注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
参考词汇：设施 facility，电梯：lift；
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                                                                                                                  
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                

Answer 1

Dr huang,
I am a disabled student. I heard that a new library will be set up in our city, and you are asking for advice on the design of the library.
In my opinion, the design of the exit should be made suitable for wheelchairs to come in and get out. As for lifts, They should be designed for the disabled, for example, the buttons of the lifts shouldn’t be too high for us to reach. When designing toilets, you should take the needs of people with disability into consideration. I think the most important is that the facilities of the toilet should be available to us.

试题分析：本文是一封建议信，请你以残疾人的角度为图书馆的设计提供一些意见。文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，但不是很具体，考生要把要点解释清楚，不能有遗漏，还要拓展内容，要充实，在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。
【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，应用了一些较好的词组和句子In my opinion,在我看来， As for至于，take … into consideration把…考虑在内， I heard the news that a new library will be set up in our city, and you are asking for advice on the design of the library.这句话用了同位语从句， the design of the exit should be made suitable for wheelchairs to come in and get out. 这句话用了不定式， be designed for为…设计， the buttons of the lifts shouldn’t be too high for us to reach. 这句话用了too…to结构，When designing toilets, you should take the needs of people with disability into consideration.这句话用了省略句， I think the most important is that the facilities of the toilet should be available to us.这句话用了表语从句。