Question

【题目】书面表达

假如你叫马羽，是第一中学的学生会主席。在报纸和电视上看到有关报道，由于伊拉克战争，导致许多儿童失学，生活状况窘迫，许多孩子沦为童工，处境很悲惨。所以你打算给全校的学生发一份倡议书，号召他们奉献爱心去帮助那些孩子们。

提示: warm houses, smile on one’s face, community service, go to school, rich, end the war, live a happy life, the war in Iraq

Answer 1

【答案】

Hello, everyone. As we know, many Iraqis have become homeless because of the war. Some of them are children. Some used to be rich, but now they lose warm houses and have no enough food to eat. The children have no chance to go to school. The hard living conditions make the homeless children become child laborers. What do you think of their terrible life?

Let’s make a wonderful program to help these children live a normal life. I think we should call on ending the war. We support these poor child laborers by raising money. So they can live in warm houses, get good educations and live happy lives. We hope there will be smiles on their faces. If you’d like to join the program, please come to our community.

Yours,

Ma Yu

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达要求学生给全校的学生发一份倡议书，号召他们奉献爱心去帮助那些孩子们。首先，审题时，应适当地进行谋篇布局。根据要求可分为两部分进行写作：1. 介绍那些儿童所处的困境；2. 应该如何奉献爱心去帮助那些孩子们。然后，应利用规范的语言，流畅的语句，适当增加细节，对存在问题及采用办法进行详细描述。最后简单总结。另外，还应尽可能地使用一些固定句型及短语，以提高文章的得分等级。

写作亮点：本文行文流畅，语言规范。还使用了一些固定短语如because of，used to be rich，have no chance to go to school，call on等等。都为文章增色不少。