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20．假如你叫李华，你发现你的英国网友Lucy的生活方式不太健康．你想给她提些建议．请你用英语给她写封电子邮件，内容包括：
1．用水果代替零食；
2．用水代替饮料，多吃蔬菜；
3．减少使用电子产品的时间；
4．多运动；
5．按时作息．
注意：1．词数100左右，短文的开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．短文中不能出现与本人相关的信息．
Dear Lucy，
I hope everything goes well with you．Do you still stay up very late every night？I'm writing to share my ideas on how you can live a healthy life．
First of all，I think it's a good idea to eat more fruits instead of snacks．Also，you need to get rid of the habit of drinking cola only．Why not drink more water？If you spend less time on y our smart phone，you can have more time to get together with friends．（高分句型一）What's more，don't you think doing sports often can make you look well-built and feel energetic at the same time？（高分句型二）
All in all，a healthy life style makes us healthy，wealthy and wise in the future．（高分句型三）Hopefully you can follow my adv ice and make a change from now on．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假如你叫李华，你发现你的英国网友Lucy的生活方式不太健康．你想给她提些建议．请你用英语给她写封电子邮件，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：用水果代替零食；用水代替饮料，多吃蔬菜；减少使用电子产品的时间；多运动；按时作息．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：go well （事情、工作、计划）进展顺利；stay up 熬夜；first of all 首先；instead of 而不是；代替；get rid of 摆脱，除去；why not do…为什么不…（表建议）；What's more 此外；all in all 总而言之
Why not drink more water？If you spend less time on y our smart phone，you can have more time to get together with friends．（高分句型一）
What's more，don't you think doing sports often can make you look well-built and feel energetic at the same time？（高分句型二）
All in all，a  healthy life style makes us healthy，wealthy and wise in the future．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Lucy，
       I hope everything goes well with you．Do you still stay up very late every night？I'm writing to share my ideas on how you can live a healthy life．
       First of all，I think it's a good idea to eat more fruits instead of snacks．Also，you need to get rid of the habit of drinking cola only．Why not drink more water？If you spend less time on y our smart phone，you can have more time to get together with friends．（高分句型一）What's more，don't you think doing sports often can make you look well-built and feel energetic at the same time？（高分句型二）
       All in all，a  healthy life style makes us healthy，wealthy and wise in the future．（高分句型三）Hopefully you can follow my adv ice and make a change from now on．
                                                                                             Yours sincerely，
                                                                                              Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．