Question

11．假设你是李华，看到你们社区招募暑假照顾老人的广告．你对此工作表示感兴趣，希望得到机会去照顾老人．请结合下面的要点，给社区负责人写一封求职信．
写作要点：
1．你对这份工作的认识；
2．你有什么优势；
3．你的计划．
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．不要逐条翻译，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．信的开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数．
Dear Sir，
I have read the advertisement on the neighborhood board andI hope to get the opportunity to serve the old in my summer vacation．（高分句型一）
Many old people are now living alone and they desire care from others physically and emotionally，especially when the summer is coming．（高分句型二）Therefore，it is important for them to realize that they aren't ignored and there is someone who cares for them．
In order to help them spend the hot days，I apply for the job because I am now 18 years old and have a strong sense of responsibility for others．（高分句型三）I will go to visit them every day，chatting with them and doing some chores for them．Besides，because I have learned how to play the guitar，I will sing songs with them and play the guitar for them．
I'm looking forward to your reply in time．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假设你是李华，看到你们社区招募暑假照顾老人的广告．你对此工作表示感兴趣，希望得到机会去照顾老人．请结合下面的要点，给社区负责人写一封求职信．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：你对这份工作的认识；你有什么优势；你的计划． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达physically and emotionally身体上和精神上；Therefore因此；care for 关心；In order to以便，为了；apply for申请；Besides另外；look forward to盼望；in time及时；
 I have read the advertisement on the neighborhood board and I hope to get the opportunity to serve the old in my summer vacation．（高分句型一）
  Many old people are now living alone and they desire care from others physically and emotionally，especially when the summer is coming．（高分句型二）
 In order to help them spend the hot days，I apply for the job because I am now 18 years old and have a strong sense of responsibility for others．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Sir，
       I have read the advertisement on the neighborhood board and I hope to get the opportunity to serve the old in my summer vacation．（高分句型一）
       Many old people are now living alone and they desire care from others physically and emotionally，especially when the summer is coming．（高分句型二）Therefore，it is important for them to realize that they aren't ignored and there is someone who cares for them．
      In order to help them spend the hot days，I apply for the job because I am now 18 years old and have a strong sense of responsibility for others．（高分句型三）I will go to visit them every day，chatting with them and doing some chores for them．Besides，because I have learned how to play the guitar，I will sing songs with them and play the guitar for them．
      I am looking forward to your reply in time．
                                     
Yours sincerely
Li Hua
 

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．