Question

【题目】请以“A Great Disaster”为题，介绍2004年12月26日上午8点左右发生在亚洲国家的由印度洋的大地震引发的海啸，内容包括以下要点：

1、海啸发生的时间

2、受灾国家: Indonesia, Thailand, Sri Lanka 等国家

3、死亡人数：28万人；另有数百万人无家可归

4、中国及时输送钱、食品和医药，并派救护队救护伤员

5、受灾国人民重建家园

［写作要求］1）只能用5个句子介绍全部所给的内容；

2）将5个句子组成连贯的短文。

［评分标准］ 句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。

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Answer 1

【答案】At about 8:00 a.m. on December 26, 2004, some Asian countries such as Indonesia, Thailand and Sri Landka were shaken by a terrible tsunami caused by the Indian Ocean earthquake. The huge waves suddenly destroyed a great many buildings, which made millions of people homeless. What’s worse, more than 280,000 people were killed, and a lot of people were injured in the tsunami. People in the tsunami-ravaged countries were in great need of help, so on hearing the bad news, China and many other countries not only supplied money, food, medicine, etc, but also sent rescue teams to help the injured and the sick there. People in these countries tried to rebuild their homes with the help of their government and other countries.

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于记叙文，介绍由印度洋的大地震引发的海啸受灾情况。

第一步：

审题：记叙文 介绍由印度洋的大地震引发的海啸受灾情况

人称：第三人称

时态：一般过去时

结构：全文为一部分，介绍海啸发生的时间、受灾国家、死亡人数、无家可归人数、

其他国家的援助情况、灾后重建情况等。

要点：

1、海啸发生的时间

2、受灾国家：Indonesia, Thailand, Sri Lanka 等国家

3、死亡人数：28万人；无家可归人数：数百万人

4、中国和其他国家援助情况：及时输送钱、食品和医药，并派救护队救护伤员

5、受灾国人民重建家园

第二步：列提纲（重点词汇、短语 ）

at about 8:00 a.m. on December 26, 2004；such as；be shaken by；cause；destroy；a great many ；millions of ；make people homeless；be killed；be injured ；in great need of ；supply；rescue teams；the injured and the sick；rebuild homes；with the help of

第三步：连词成句

(1) At about 8:00 a.m. on December 26, 2004, some Asian countries were shaken by a terrible tsunami.

(2) The terrible tsunami was caused by the Indian Ocean earthquake.

(3) The huge waves destroyed a great many buildings.

(4) It made millions of people homeless.

(5)More than 280,000 people were killed.

(6) A lot of people were injured in the tsunami.

(7) People were in great need of help.

(8) When China and many other countries heard the bad news, they supplied money, food, medicine, etc.

(9) They also sent rescue teams to help the injured and the sick there.

(10) People tried to rebuild their homes with the help of their government and other countries.

根据提示和关键词进行遣词造句，适当地运用句型，注意时态和主谓一致问题。

第四步：连句成篇(衔接词、亮点词汇)

用过去分词短语作后置定语连接下面连个句子

(1) At about 8:00 a.m. on December 26, 2004, some Asian countries were shaken by a terrible tsunami.

(2) The terrible tsunami was caused by the Indian Ocean earthquake.

→At about 8:00 a.m. on December 26, 2004, some Asian countries were shaken by a terrible tsunami caused by the Indian Ocean earthquake.

用which引导的非限制性定语从句连接下面两个句子

(3)The huge waves destroyed a great many buildings.

(4) It made millions of people homeless.

→(3)The huge waves destroyed a great many buildings，which made millions of people homeless.

用表示“一……就”的句式表达下面的句子

(8) When China and many other countries heard the bad news, they supplied money, food, medicine, etc.

→On hearing the bad news, China and many other countries supplied money, food, medicine, etc.

→The moment / minute China and many other countries heard the bad news, they supplied money, food, medicine, etc.

→As soon as China and many other countries heard the bad news, they supplied money, food, medicine, etc.

用not only… but also 连接下面的连个句子

(8) When China and many other countries heard the bad news, they supplied money, food, medicine, etc.

(9) They also sent rescue teams to help the injured and the sick there.

→On hearing the bad news, China and many other countries not only supplied money, food, medicine, etc , but also sent rescue teams to help the injured and the sick there.

适当地运用高级词汇、复杂句式提升文章的档次 ，增加文章的可读性。