Question

11．假如你是李华．去年你在一家国际夏令营帮忙，收获颇丰．今年，你想邀请你的好友Jane一起参加，请根据夏令营的招聘广告及提示要点给Jane给一封e-mail．

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Answer 1

分析 分析：提纲作文应该按所要求的内容来写，根据所列的内容尽量以简明扼要的语言来表达．根据题目要求和所列内容来完成作文．写这篇作文时尽量用所列出的词汇和短语，运用高级的英语句子，真正体现英式的表达方式．写作时要注意适当地使用关联词承前启后，用词要得体，符合语言环境．
（高分句型一）I have already told you about the job I did last summer in the International Camp for children，do you remember？
该句使用了定语从句，I did last summer 修饰先行词the job，因为关系代词做did宾语可以省略．
高分句型二）The camp is situated in a wood，close to a river．
句子使用close to a river修饰营地的位置靠近小河边，突出了地理位置．
（高分句型三）Everybody sleeps in tents，which is very exciting．
使用which引导非限制性定语从句，修饰整个句子．
【亮点】文中使用了非常好的短语为文章增色不少，work with，is situated in，on our own，As well as，等．并注意了句子的衔接如：And，so，As well as，if，but等．

解答 Dear Jane，
  （高分句型一）I have already told you about the job I did last summer in the International Camp for children，do you remember？And this year they are looking for people for the same job so I have thought about you．Why don't we do it together？
  We will work with children between 8 and 12 and will help with the outdoor activities，sports competitions and children's games．（高分句型二）The camp is situated in a wood，close to a river．It is such a beautiful place!（高分句型三）Everybody sleeps in tents，which is very exciting．We have only 5 hours'work a day so it gives us enough free time to visit the area and do some sports activities on our own．As well as the accommodation，the food is free．It is not wonderful，but it is not the most important．
  The contact with the children，the feeling of freedom，the sense of responsibility and the life in nature make this camp an unforgettable experience．
  Let me know as soon as possible if you are interested in it，but don't hesitate too much．It is worth!
  I am looking forward to hearing from you soon．
                                                             Yours，
                                                             Li Hua

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