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1．假设你是李华，端午节放假期间和家人一起到天龙山国家森林公园（Tianlongshan National Forest Park）游玩，在游玩过程中发现了一些令你不满意的地方，请你就此用英语给该景区主管部门的负责人写一封信，投诉相关问题．内容包括：
1．问题：私家车和单车乱停放；小贩（vendor）围住游客兜售商品；地上有乱扔的果皮，塑料袋，包装纸等各种垃圾；厕所不干净，有异味；路口指引标志不清晰；游客太多．
2．你的建议：…（建议一、两条即可）
注意：1．写作内容请勿超出作文纸所限范围，超出部分无效；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．信的开头和结尾已给出．
Dear Sir/Madam，
I am writing to make a complaint．This Dragon Boat Festival holiday I，as well as my family with great expectations of relaxing and enjoying ourselves，paid a visit to the famous tourist attraction，Tianlongshan National Forest Park．（高分句型一）However，I felt very disappointed at what I had experienced there．
As we got closer to the park，we found it more difficult for us to move forward，as many drivers parked their cars where they shouldn't park and cyclists put their bikes wherever they could，which badly blocked the way to the park．（高分句型二）Hardly had we got off the coach when we were surrounded by the vendors，whom we could hardly get rid of，trying their best to sell their goods．（高分句型三）To my relief，we finally managed to reach the forest area，and the fresh air and beautiful scenery there made me intoxicated．But the rubbish，such as fruit skins，food packages and plastic bags thrown here and there by tourists spoiled the view and my good mood．What's worse，the toilets are dirty and stinky．Apart from that，too many people and confusing road signs exhausted me and my patience．
Needless to say，it's time to take actions immediately to improve the unsatisfying conditions．I think，for example，more workers should be arranged to solve the problems of disorderly parking，and perhaps selling tickets online in advance is a good way to avoid the park being too crowded．（高分句型四）I hope in the near future the National Forest Park will become true to its name．I look forward to your reply．
Thank you for your consideration
Sincerely yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假设你是李华，端午节放假期间和家人一起到天龙山国家森林公园（Tianlongshan National Forest Park）游玩，在游玩过程中发现了一些令你不满意的地方，请你就此用英语给该景区主管部门的负责人写一封信，投诉相关问题，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：问题：私家车和单车乱停放；小贩（vendor）围住游客兜售商品；地上有乱扔的果皮，塑料袋，包装纸等各种垃圾；厕所不干净，有异味；路口指引标志不清晰；游客太多．你的建议：…（建议一、两条即可）2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：make a complaint抱怨；as well as也，和；pay a visit to拜访；However然而；get rid of去除，摆脱；Hardly…when一…就；Apart from出…之外；Needless to say无需多说；look forward to盼望；
This Dragon Boat Festival holiday I，as well as my family with great expectations of relaxing and enjoying ourselves，paid a visit to the famous tourist attraction，Tianlongshan National Forest Park．（高分句型一）
As we got closer to the park，we found it more difficult for us to move forward，as many drivers parked their cars where they shouldn't park and cyclists put their bikes wherever they could，which badly blocked the way to the park．（高分句型二）
Hardly had we got off the coach when we were surrounded by the vendors，whom we could hardly get rid of，trying their best to sell their goods．（高分句型三）
I think，for example，more workers should be arranged to solve the problems of disorderly parking，and perhaps selling tickets online in advance is a good way to avoid the park being too crowded．（高分句型四）

解答 Dear Sir/Madam，
       I am writing to you to make a complaint．This Dragon Boat Festival holiday I，as well as my family with great expectations of relaxing and enjoying ourselves，paid a visit to the famous tourist attraction，Tianlongshan National Forest Park．（高分句型一）However，I felt very disappointed at what I had experienced there．
       As we got closer to the park，we found it more difficult for us to move forward，as many drivers parked their cars where they shouldn't park and cyclists put their bikes wherever they could，which badly blocked the way to the park．（高分句型二）Hardly had we got off the coach when we were surrounded by the vendors，whom we could hardly get rid of，trying their best to sell their goods．（高分句型三）To my relief，we finally managed to reach the forest area，and the fresh air and beautiful scenery there made me intoxicated．But the rubbish，such as fruit skins，food packages and plastic bags thrown here and there by tourists spoiled the view and my good mood．What's worse，the toilets are dirty and stinky．Apart from that，too many people and confusing road signs exhausted me and my patience．
      Needless to say，it's time to take actions immediately to improve the unsatisfying conditions．I think，for example，more workers should be arranged to solve the problems of disorderly parking，and perhaps selling tickets online in advance is a good way to avoid the park being too crowded．（高分句型四）I hope in the near future the National Forest Park will become true to its name．I look forward to your reply．
       Thank you for your consideration．
                                                                                                                                                                                         Sincerely yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                  Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．