题目内容
【题目】假定你叫李华,你校外教George很想学习中国太极(Taichi), 想找一位中国教练。请给他写封邮件,内容包括:
1. 已为他找了一名教练王先生;
2. 简单介绍王先生;
3. 询问什么时候开始学习。
注意:1. 词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
Dear George,
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Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear George,
How’s everything going? Last time you told me that you are interested in Chinese Taichi and wanted to have a Taichi coach. Now, good news for you. I have found you a Taichi coach, Mr. Wang, who is 50 and an expert in Taichi. Since he was 20, he has been teaching Taichi in a Chinese Kung Fu School in our city. Most importantly, he can teach Taichi in both Chinese and English. He has promised to teach you how to play it after work because he hopes to make an effort to spread the traditional culture. So please tell me when you can begin your practice of Taichi.
I’m looking forward to you reply.
Best wishes.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
这是一篇应用文写作,要求根据提示内容给外教写一封信,属于书信体写作中介绍信与询问信的综合。
作为一篇常见的书信体应用文写作,顺利完成此题主要依赖于平时的词汇和句式积累。写作时需注意两个要点:
要点1:仔细审题,理清结构。
根据题意,你是李华,外教George很想学习中国太极, 想找一位中国教练。请给他写封邮件,包含三项内容:已为他找了一名教练王先生(简明扼要);简单介绍王先生(此处的简单并非指略写,在本文中此写作点属于主体内容,应适当展开);询问什么时候开始学习(简明扼要)。根据审题结果可知,全文应综合使用三种人称(分别对应李华、外教和王先生),一般现在时与现在完成时结合的方式进行写作。
要点2:充实内容,打磨语言。
文章开篇和结尾都应该加入适当的引入、寒暄或收尾内容,如“How’s everything going?”等。在文章的重点部分,应对内容进行适当拓展,如王先生进行太极教学的经验十分丰富,能用英语和中文进行教学(特别考虑到外教的语言沟通问题)等。写作时,应特别注意语言表达的地道性,同时注意上下文之间的衔接,善用连接词。