Question

15．假定你是李华，刚获得全校英语演讲比赛一等奖．请给你的外教Jack写一封英语感谢信，要点如下：
1．表示感谢；
2．回顾Jack对你的帮助和指导；
3．宝贵经验．
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Jack，
I'm writing to tell you good news that I have won the first prize in our school's English Speech Contest．（高分句型一）I really appreciate your guidance and great help．
Looking back on the process of preparing for the contest，I'll never forget the great progress I made with your help．（高分句型二）Not only did you correct the mistakes in my pronunciation，you also recommended wonderful English speech videos for me to imitate．What's more，it was your constant encouragement that inspired me to be confident，which played a vital role in winning the contest．（高分句型三）
Through the contest，I've realized that only when we set a goal and work hard towards it can we gain success in the end．
Many thanks again．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假定你是李华，刚获得全校英语演讲比赛一等奖．请给你的外教Jack写一封英语感谢信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：表示感谢；回顾Jack对你的帮助和指导；宝贵经验． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：English Speech Contest英语演讲比赛；Look back on回顾；Not only，（but）also 不仅，而且；What's more而且；
I'm writing to tell you good news that I have won the first prize in our school's English Speech Contest．（高分句型一）
Looking back on the process of preparing for the contest，I'll never forget the great progress I made with your help．（高分句型二）
What's more，it was your constant encouragement that inspired me to be confident，which played a vital role in winning the contest．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Jack，
      I'm writing to tell you good news that I have won the first prize in our school's English Speech Contest．（高分句型一）I really appreciate your guidance and great help．
      Looking back on the process of preparing for the contest，I'll never forget the great progress I made with your help．（高分句型二）Not only did you correct the mistakes in my pronunciation，you also recommended wonderful English speech videos for me to imitate．What's more，it was your constant encouragement that inspired me to be confident，which played a vital role in winning the contest．（高分句型三）
      Through the contest，I've realized that only when we set a goal and work hard towards it can we gain success in the end．
      Many thanks again．
                                                                                                                                                                                        Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．