Question

6．假定你是李华，你的加拿大笔友Jack来信说他在学校举行的诗歌朗诵赛（poetry recital contest）中获得了一等奖． 请用英语给他写一封电子邮件表示祝贺．
内容主要包括：
1．表达你的祝贺；
2．钦佩他的付出；
3．请他给你推荐一些英语诗歌．
注意1．词数100左右；
2．可适当增加细节以使行文连贯；
Dear Jack，
I am glad to hear that you won first prize in the poetry recital contest held inyour school．（高分句型一） Please accept my sincere congratulations．It is indeed a remarkable thing for you to have achieved so great a success considering you once had great trouble reading poems out loud and were scared to speak in public．（高分句型二）It must feel great to finally see your efforts pay off．Your success again proved that where there is a will，there is a way．（高分句型三）By the way，I have become interested in English poems recently．So would you please recommend some good English poems to me？
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假定你是李华，你的加拿大笔友Jack来信说他在学校举行的诗歌朗诵赛（poetry recital contest）中获得了一等奖． 请用英语给他写一封电子邮件表示祝贺，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：表达你的祝贺；钦佩他的付出；请他给你推荐一些英语诗歌．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：first prize 一等奖；considering考虑到，鉴于；have great trouble in doing sth在做某事方面有麻烦；By the way顺便说一下；become interested in对…感兴趣；
I am glad to hear that you won first prize in the poetry recital contest held in your school．（高分句型一）
It is indeed a remarkable thing for you to have achieved so great a success considering you once had great trouble reading poems out loud and were scared to speak in public．（高分句型二）
It must feel great to finally see your efforts pay off．Your success again proved that where there is a will，there is a way．（高分句型三

解答 Dear Jack，
       I am glad to hear that you won first prize in the poetry recital contest held in your school．（高分句型一） Please accept my sincere congratulations．It is indeed a remarkable thing for you to have achieved so great a success considering you once had great trouble reading poems out loud and were scared to speak in public．（高分句型二）It must feel great to finally see your efforts pay off．Your success again proved that where there is a will，there is a way．（高分句型三）By the way，I have become interested in English poems recently．So would you please recommend some good English poems to me？
                                                                                                                                                                                                        Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                        Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．