题目内容
【题目】假设你是李华,收到美国笔友Jane的来信,谈到在学习和生活中的一些困扰。请你根据以下内容提示,给她回一封信,提出相应的建议。
面临的困扰:1.学习有困难;2.与同学相处不好;3.沉迷于网络…
相应的建议:1.多花时间,用心…;2.真诚待人…3..…
注意:1.词数100左右;
2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3. 首句已给出,不计入总词数.
Dear Jane,
I’m sorry to hear that you have some problems in your life.
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Your sincerely,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Jane,
I’m sorry to hear that you have some problems in your life. I’d like to offer you some advice on how to solve the problems. About the study you have mentioned, I suggest that you spend more time and put your heart into it. After all, no pains, no gains. Work hard, and your efforts will pay off in time. As to how to get along well with your classmates, you should remember that kindness is very important. I believe that so long as you are kind to your classmates, you will be able to make friends with them. Lastly, although the Internet is very helpful in finding information , you should not be addicted to it. It is important to make use of your time to study. I hope that you will find my advice useful and that everything will be OK. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Best wishes.
Your sincerely,
Li Hua
【解析】本文属于应用文中的书信,要求就美国笔友Jane在学习和生活中的一些困扰给她写回信,提出相应的建议。以第一人称为主。要点:1. 面临的困扰:(1).学习有困难;(2).与同学相处不好;(3).沉迷于网络…;2. 相应的建议:(1).多花时间,用心…;(2).真诚待人…(3)..…;3.表达你的期待。本作文中给出的要点比较具体,故需要准确表达.写作时注意准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系,也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词,使文章具有一定的连贯性。考生必须认真查验是否有漏写情况,有无拼写错误及标点误用等。
【亮点说明】
范文中运用了高级词汇mention、Lastly、大量的短语After all、pay off、As to、be addicted to、以及多变句型如:虚拟语气:I suggest that you spend more time and put your heart into it..谚语 After all, no pains, no gains.