Question

8．请根据下面的提示写一篇短文，介绍你所崇拜的一位偶像．主要包括以下内容：
1．偶像的身份、外貌及性格特征；
2．你崇拜的理由；
3．对你的积极影响．
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．提示词：偶像 idol
Of all the people I know，I admire my father most．He is short and plain-looking．His dark skin and strong body are results of hard labor．As a farmer，he is a man with many skills，making him known as"Capable man"in our neighborhood．（高分句型一）My father is kind and helpful，so our neighbors often turn to him for help whenever they have trouble．
It is my father's capability and personality that makes him my idol．（高分句型二）Because to me，an idol is not someone who looks great and achieves huge success but someone whose example Ican follow．（高分句型三）My father is always inspiring me to move forward steadily and happily．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息请根据下面的提示写一篇短文，介绍你所崇拜的一位偶像．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：偶像的身份、外貌及性格特征；你崇拜的理由；对你的积极影响． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：turn to sb for help向某人求助；have trouble有麻烦；move forward steadily and happily幸福而稳步前进；
As a farmer，he is a man with many skills，making him known as"Capable man"in our neighborhood．（高分句型一）
It is my father's capability and personality that makes him my idol．（高分句型二）
Because to me，an idol is not someone who looks great and achieves huge success but someone whose example I can follow．（高分句型三）

解答 Of all the people I know，I admire my father most．He is short and plain-looking．His dark skin and strong body are results of hard labor．As a farmer，he is a man with many skills，making him known as"Capable man"in our neighborhood．（高分句型一）My father is kind and helpful，so our neighbors often turn to him for help whenever they have trouble．
      It is my father's capability and personality that makes him my idol．（高分句型二）Because to me，an idol is not someone who looks great and achieves huge success but someone whose example I can follow．（高分句型三）My father is always inspiring me to move forward steadily and happily．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．