Question

【题目】书面表达

请阅读下面短文,并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。

Cleanliness is important to academic success at one Chinese university where compulsory labor is part of a program designed to award class credits while teaching students with proper moral values.

During winter, the sky is still dark at 6:30 a.m. when the first-year students in Trade and Management College in Zhengzhou begin sweeping the 165-acre campus and it can take up to an hour.

Mr. Sun, the university official, said labor is good for building character and promotes “the spirit of hard work.” Some students also claim that they are always proud of the clean campus. They never litter because they’ve been through the labor and understand that they should respect the fruits of labor of others.

Some students, however, are against it because they feel the demands of the cleaning program are a distraction. Some often show up late and hungry to their morning classes after rushing to sweep the campus and clean their rooms.

【写作内容】

1. 用约30个单词写出上文概要；

2. 用约120个单词发表你的观点，内容包括：

(1) 支持或反对这个学校的做法；

用2-3个理由或论据支撑你的观点。

【写作要求】

1. 可以支持文中任一观点，但必须提供理由或论据；

2. 阐述观点或提供论据时，不能直接引用原文语句；

3. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；

4. 不必写标题。

【评分标准】

内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。

Answer 1

【答案】

支持：

One university in Zhengzhou designs a program where students must clean the campus every day and relates it to class credits. Some people support the program while others do not. (30)

Generally, I am in favor of the practice. To begin with, through their effort, students provide a clean and comfortable environment, which, as a result, is an assurance of their successful academic life. Moreover, cleaning and labor can not only serve to build students’ character but also contribute positively to students developing healthy routines and good sanitation habits. Last but not least, by enjoying the fruits of others’ labor, students will develop the awareness of gratitude and regard labor as a matter of honor.

In short, carrying out the cleaning program is crucial. The significance for students of participating in it means more than academic success. It is part of moral education and benefits students as well as the campus. (120)

反对：

It is required by one university in Zhengzhou that students should clean the campus every morning to achieve class credits. Opinions on the practice vary widely from person to person. (30)

I am strongly opposed to the practice for the following reasons. First of all, cleaning tends to take up too much time, which becomes a distraction for students and discourages them from focusing on their academic performances. Then, students can be encouraged to maintain clean living areas but it’s unreasonable to relate the cleaning with the academic credits. As students, they should put more efforts into their studies to achieve class credits instead of sweeping the campus. Furthermore, though someone claims labor can contribute to developing the spirit of hard work, it should by no means be achieved through daily floor-sweeping.

In conclusion, there is no sense in students sweeping the campus, for it benefits neither their character nor study. (120)

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇立场选择型作文写作。动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容。认真看清题目要求，这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，要求有很高的概括提炼的能力，要抓住文章的主题，再以约120个词写一篇短文，按照要点去表达，不能有遗漏，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。

支持：

第一段缩写题文。就两句话，点出主题背景，引出争论话题， 30字一气呵成。where的成功引导使得大段的文字浓缩在这一精简的复合句中。第二段表明自己立场。Generally, I am in favor of the practice. Generally开头，增色不少。To begin with, through their effort, students provide a clean and comfortable environment, which, as a result, is an assurance of their successful academic life.这一亮点句中，To begin with连词使用得当，梳理论述次序，而其后长短句结合，使得句子读起来抑扬顿挫，夹杂单词which引导非限制性定语从句以及as a result做插入语成分，一下子使作文上升了一个档次。Moreover，进而论述。not only…but also…的使用经典搭配将繁杂内容一次打包。Last but not least，最后一点。develop the awareness of gratitude and regard labor as a matter of honor理由确切不牵强。第三段总结，In short. 其中significance，participating和as well as的使用可圈可点。

反对：

第一段概括上文的主要内容，It is required by…Opinions on the practice vary widely from person to person句子新颖且承上启下。第二段表明自身立场，strongly opposed强烈反对。First of all首先，思路明确，紧接which引导的非限制性定语从句将。Then接着，进而论述。but 和instead of在承接句子间顺折关系时效果不错。As students …设定从学生角度出发，说理更合情。Furthermore，再上一层楼。it should by no means 的使用使得句式再添一彩。第三段总结，In conclusion，文末总结。使用there is no sense…语气感强烈，而neither …nor...便水到渠成地将受益两者都否定掉。 (120)