Question

人们常说“父爱如山”。请你根据这句话，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文，谈谈你和你的父亲之间难忘的小事与感受。

注意： 1. 词数：120左右。 2. 适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

 

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

When I was a little girl, I used to sit on my father’s knees, listening to his stories. I treasure my memories of those joyous days.

Once when I was helping him clean the living room, I broke a vase presented by my father’s best friend, which was very dear to my father. I felt nervous and I was afraid that my father would be angry with me. However, when he came in, he first asked if I was hurt. After I said I was OK, he smiled and said he would ask his friends to give him another one.

I’m sure my father’s love will lead me to my success and I will love him forever.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达是一篇记叙文。文章主题为“父爱如山”，主要记叙自己和父亲之间难忘的小事和感受。做题时包括以下几个方面：（1）层次结构，（2）句子的时态（3）内容要点。尤其是内容要点要把握准确到位，要点需要考生拿捏准确以及正确，这加大了写作难度。再者考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。而且写作时还应注意细节上的补充以丰富文章内容，使行文连贯顺畅。

【亮点说明】范文概括精当，观点明确，不乏好的词组和句子，如：When I was a little girl, I used to sit on my father’s knees, listening to his stories.这句话用了非谓语动词，Once when I was helping him clean the living room, I broke a vase presented by my father’s best friend, which was very dear to my father.这句话用了非限定性定语从句。

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