Question

【题目】假如你是松松，请就本校食堂服务（canteen service）的状况给勇哥写一封信。内容包括：

优点	不足	建议
食堂干净	价格偏高	？
饭菜可口	各类偏少
服务态度好	等候时间较长

注意：1. 词数100左右；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3. 开头语和结束语已为你写好。

Dear Yong Ge,

I am a senior student of our school. I’d like to say something about the canteen service in our school. __________________________________________________

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Yong Ge,

I am a senior student of our school. I'd like to say something about the canteen service in our school. In general, the service is satisfactory. The hall is clean and tidy. The dishes look inviting and taste delicious as

well. What's more, the workers there treat us as their friends, which makes us feel very happy.

However, we feel the price of the meals is a little too high. Besides, we can only have a limited variety of dishes with little change every week. In addition, we often have to stand in line for a long time before we can get the meal. You could understand how precious time is to us students. Therefore, may I suggest something be done to solve the problems so that we can all enjoy our meals at school?

Thanks for your consideration.

Sincerely yours,

Sonson

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达属于应用文，内容是写一封书信说一下本校食堂服务。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态。 4.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如the workers there treat us as their friends, which makes us feel very happy.为非限定定语从句。此外，文章还使用了大量短语would like to, talk about等短语。副词what’s more的使用使文章内容更具有层次感，也使语言更加连贯。