2.误点点拨：①处改为：will be reduced from…,此处应该为被动语态。

　　　　　　 ②处改为Just as the saying goes, good health is over wealth。此处使用的仅仅是一个分句，故改为定语从句。

[范文]:

Teachers and fellow students,

May I have your attention, please? It’s now 6 o’clock in the evening. Here is the weather report.

There will be a strong wind from this midnight to two early tomorrow morning and the temperature will drop by 5℃ to 8℃. Also it’s going to be cloudy or there may be light snowfalls tomorrow morning. Therefore, make sure that all the windows and doors are closed when you leave the classroom tonight in case they might be broken by the strong wind. You see, it’s getting colder and colder, so I’d like to remind you that you should put on more clothes when getting up the following morning to protect yourself from cold. After all, good health is of vital importance to anyone. That’s all. Thank you a lot.

Here’s Li Hua reporting.

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1.总体评价：文章为口头通知备用稿。虽然通知单的对象、内容、时间、要求都比较清楚，但通知的格式不正确(-6分)；同时还有句型错误，因此这篇短文按照第三档给分。

2.　　 书面通知

写书面通知时,应明确写出发出通知的单位和日期.一般情况下,书面通知的首行中央写上Notice或An Announcement等.通知的发布单位常写在正文结束的右下角,也可以写在Notice 的上方或前面,发布通知的日期一般写在正文的左下角(在落款的下一行)或写在通知正文的右上角(在Notice的下一行).

口头通知和书面通知都是宣布即将发生的事情及其具体内容,因而多用将来时,一般用祈使句来强调.通知的语言要简洁明了,条理清晰,准确无误,特别是时间概念很重要,必须写得十分明确,不容丝毫含糊。

除了上面提到的称呼和开头语外，主题内容可参照以下模板：

In order to__________, ________is to be held on _________(day), ________(date), at_______(time) in_________(place). Whoever is interested in it is welcome to attend _________. Those who want to take part in _________ please sign up at the Students’ Union.

Please remember:____________________.

[例题体验]

　 假定你是学校的业余气象员李华,请你在晚上6:00根据电台天气预报节目中得知的天气情况,通过广播用英语向全体学生作天气预报,并提出忠告.要点如下表:

时段 项目	午夜至凌晨2:00	明天早晨	上午
天气情况	大风,降温5℃ 至8℃	阴天,有小雪
要求与忠告	离开教室时要关好门窗;起床时要多穿衣服,注意保暖,以防感冒。

注意：1.必须包括所给要点,但不可逐条译成英语; 2. 词数;150左右.

[学生习作]

Hello, everyone,

How are you? It’s now 6 o’clock in the evening. I want to tell you about the weather report.

A strong wind is on the way and will last from this midnight to two early tomorrow morning and the temperature will(-2分)①reduce from 5℃ to 8℃. Also it’s going to be cloudy with light snowfalls tomorrow morning. So it is my advice that all the windows and doors should be closed before you leave the classroom tonight because the strong wind is surely to break them into pieces. However that’s far from enough. As you know, people tend to get cold when the weather changes. So you’d better put on more clothes when you get up the next morning. (-2分)②Just as the saying goes that good health is over wealth. That’s all. Thank you a lot.(按第三档给分)

[习作评析]

一)通知

1.　　 口头通知

(1)　　 口头通知通常是口头传达的消息,表达时要尽可能地口语化,做到言简意赅.口头通知一般不用写出通知的时间或发出通知的单位.

(2)　　 口头通知的开头常要有称呼语,具体应根据通知的对象而定.常用的称呼语有:Boys and girls, Ladies and gentlemen, Comrades and friends, Teachers and fellow students 等.注意:写称呼语时,首行应顶格写.

(3)　　 口头通知常用的开头有:May I have your attention, please !/ Attention, please! / Please be quiet. / Listen, please!等.结束语常: That’s all. Thank you (for listening)!等, 以示礼貌.

4.　　　 ……

要求：1.词数150左右，文章的第一句已为你写好，不计入词数。2.不可照译，可适当扩展。

Mary, a lovely girl, with big eyes and glasses, has recently won the first prize in the writing contest._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

3.　　　 她勤学多练。

2.　　　 她善于以独特的方式观察周围的世界。

1.　　　 她爱好读书，由此培养了浓厚的写作兴趣。

6.你的朋友Mary最近获得了学校作文比赛一等奖，你们学校英语校报让你去采访她。请根据以下要点写一篇文章关于Mary获奖的原因。

3.画龙点睛：文章的第一句和第二句可以合为一句：Mr. Green, only several years older than us, is considered very special…。

[范文]

Mr. Green, several years older than us, is a really special teacher. He is very tall and has a beard, which makes him look unusually serious. In fact, he is most kind and humorous. He seems born able to make his class full of laughter all the time, which explains why he is also called Magician. For example, during the class, he always has ways of giving us a surprise, such as making a joke or singing a song and so on. So what he teaches comes natural to us. What’s more, he can easily cheer up one in low spirits. Therefore, not strangely, he has been regarded as our friend we can turn to when we are in difficulty.

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