Question

书面表达（满分25分）

你是李华，你很烦恼。最近，每天早晚，你们小区广场上都有很多人在跳广场舞，持续时间长且噪音大，给你和小区里其他人带来了很多的不便……请你给小区委员会领导写封信，反映现象及其导致的不便（要求涉及生活、学习和工作等方面）并提出合理建议。

注意：

1、词数120左右；

2、短文的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

参考词汇： 广场舞 square dance 组织者organizers

Dear Sir,

I am writing to tell you something about the people doing the square dance in our community, which has made me terribly upset.

 

 

 

Best wishes,

Sincerely yours,

Li Hua

 

 

Answer 1

Dear Sir,

I am writing to tell you something about the people doing the square dance in our community, which has made me terribly upset.

Recently, every morning and evening, many people gather to dance in our community square, which does help to keep healthy. However, the long-time dancing and the noise pollution caused by the loudspeaker really bring about unbearable inconveniences.

We can’t rest or sleep well. As a result, the students are not only late for school but also sleepy in class, and the workers are easily tired out while working.

Here are some suggestions to solve the problem. They are supposed either to shorten the dancing time and reduce the music noise or to make another choice of dancing places. Only in this way can they have fun and let others enjoy life.

Would you please communicate with the organizers about what I said?

Best wishes,

Sincerely yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：题目要求给小区居委会领导写信，反映广场舞带来的不便。不便之处要涉及生活、学习、工作等，并提出合理的建议。词数在120词左右，开头和结尾不计入总词数。注意书信的格式，不能出现标点、拼写错误。要用上参考词汇。

亮点说明：

范文注意使用Recently, However, As a result等连接句子与段落，使作文比较连贯、通顺；

范文使用了定语从句which does help to keep healthy；非谓语动词caused by the loudspeaker；倒装Only in this way can they have fun，宾语从句what I said等语法知识，提高了作文的档次；

范文使用了较多的短语和固定搭配：bring about，not only ...but also，be tired out，either...or，make a choice of，communicate with，are supposed to do sth等，使作文内容比较充实；

范文使用了一些高级词汇：unbearable，inconveniences，sleepy等，给作文增色不少。

考点：书信类作文