Question

高三学生面临沉重的学习压力， 很多学生利用课间十分钟的休息时间学习， 实际上没有什么效果。假如你是新华中学高三年级的李立， 就此现象给中学生英语报写封信，发表自己的看法。信的内容包括以下要点：

1. 十分钟的课间休息的必要性（说明理由）；

2. 你是怎样利用这十分钟的。

注意：1. 词数 120-150； 2. 信的开头已经给出（不计入总数）。

Dear Editor,

I’m a Senior 3 student from Xinhua Middle school. _________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

Yours,

Li Li

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

Dear Editor,

I’m a Senior 3 student from Xinhua Middle School. As is known to all, senior 3 students are suffering heavy pressure of study. As a result, many students are trying to spare every minute to study, even during the ten-minute break between classes.

In my opinion, taking the ten-minute break between classes is definitely necessary, which makes us relaxed both physically and mentally. The ten-minute break is meant for us to relax and prepare for the next class. Only by doing so can we have more energy to study effectively in class.

My ten-minute break is always pleasing as well as relaxing. Sometimes I do some simple exercises. Sometimes I have a free chat with my classmates or just take a walk outside. Therefore, I always feel energetic and listen attentively in class.

【解析】

试题分析：

根据提示可知本文为信件类作文。信件类作文要注意格式和结束语。可以采取一般作文的三段式结构，第一段用两到三句话如I’m a Senior 3 student from Xinhua Middle School和many students are trying to spare every minute to study, even during the ten-minute break between classes简单介绍自我和写作目的。正文部分用三到四句话讲述写作背景及目的。在这一段的描述中，注意阐明清楚出题者的两点要求“1. 十分钟的课间休息的必要性（说明理由）；2. 你是怎样利用这十分钟的”。可以用in my opinion, as far as I can see, in my view, I think that 等等引出自己观点。当然同学们可以将这两点要求分开阐述，第二点要求写在第三段里。检查全文的时候再加上适当的过渡词如First，besides等使得文章上下文衔接自然，最后检查格式。

【亮点说明】

本篇范文结构清晰，层次分明，段首句即为该段的中心句，如In my opinion, taking the ten-minute break between classes is definitely necessary和第三段的My ten-minute break is always pleasing as well as relaxing。其次文章中各种句型灵活使用，如第一段的as引导的非限制性定语从句As is known to all, senior 3 students are suffering heavy pressure of study。第二段中的句型变化更为巧妙，如动名词taking the ten-minute break between classes做主语，以及which引导的非限制性定语从句which makes us relaxed both physically and mentally。还有only接状语位于句首的部分倒装句Only by doing so can we have more energy to study effectively in class。精彩句型非常多，就不一一列举了。而且正文部分结构清晰，对出题者的要求都包括在内。最后是各种短语如as a result, be meant for sb. to do sth,等的使用，都为文章增色不少。