Question

写作内容：
假如你是李华，在美国留学。你母亲今天下午要从国内来看你，但你凑巧要去做个讲座，故给你的朋友Peter留下字条请他下午三点半去机场接你母亲。因Peter未见过你母亲，请根据下表在字条中描述你母亲的特征以便他辨认。

age	around sixty
appearance	fat, short, gray hair, a long face
clothes	a white blouse, brown trousers
luggage	a yellow suitcase

 
写作要求：
1．必须使用5个句子介绍全部所给内容；
2．词数：100词左右。开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。
评分标准：
句子结构的准确性和复杂度；信息内容的完整性和连贯性。
Sunday
Peter,
I am very glad that my mother is coming this afternoon by air.
                                                      
                                                      
                                                      
                                                      
                                                      
                                                      
                                                      
                                                       
I will be grateful to you for your help.
Yours,

Answer 1

One possible version:
Sunday
Peter,
　　I am very glad that my mother is coming this afternoon by air. But I have to give a lecture and have no time to meet her. I am writing to ask you to meet my mother at the airport at 3:30 for me. As you have never seen her before, I will say something about her to help you recognize her. She is around sixty years old, fat and short, with a long face and gray hair. I have been told she is dressed in a white blouse and brown trousers and she will take a yellow suitcase with her.
　　I will be grateful to you for your help.
　　                                                 Yours,

试题分析：考生首先要仔细审题，包括以下几个方面：（1）层次结构，（2）句子的时态（3）内容要点。尤其是内容要点要把握准确到位，这是提纲作文，要点需要考生拿捏准确以及正确，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。因为只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。又要包括所有的要点，考生要多使用复杂句，一句话中多包含些信息，如范文里面的句子：I have been told she is dressed in a white blouse and brown trousers and she will take a yellow suitcase with her.就包含了几个要点内容。
点评：作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合作文要求，句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。文中使用一些极佳的词语和句子为文章增色，使用高级词汇及句型。