Question

15．Vivek opens up the window of his room and feels the fresh air of the morning．This is a very special day in his life．He is enjoying himself，recollecting all the efforts he has taken to see this day in his life．
Vivek，an engineering graduate，was rejected from selection 12times．After every attempt he learned something new about his personality and corrected his mistake．He believed that his failure was not defeat but an important step to achieving his goal．He prepared and practiced well and got through in his 13^th attempt （the number which everyone believes is unlucky）．Vivek has proved that there is nothing called luck but sincere effort is what takes one to success．
Vivek，from all his previous experience he had faced during the selection process，had taken it as a challenge to perform well during his training period．He believed in himself and completed his training in style．
Vivek wears white uniform and is ready for the Passing Out Parade．He has marched all his life to perform at the Indian Naval Academy．Vivek's parents are present to see their getting commissioned as an officer．They are also proud of their son for his achievement．
Now vivek marches up the stage to receive the Sword of Honor Award from the Naval Chief．Vivek's achievement is something really great and the whole crowd becomes delighted and excited when Vivek's story is narrated to the world．Vivek has given this moral（寓意）to the world：After every dark night there is bright sunlight．
[写作内容]
1．以约30个词概括上文的主要内容．
2．以约120词就"坚持与成功"这个主题谈谈你的看法，内容包括：
（1）坚持与成功的关系；
（2）简述你或者你周围的人因为坚持而最后取得成功的例子；
（3）如何才能做到坚持下去．
[写作要求]
1．在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称．
[评分标准]
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇读写任务作文，根据所提供的材料信息，概括短文内容，并以"坚持与成功"为主题，写出自己的看法．
写作时，应以第一人称为主，时态为一般现在时，写作要点：1．概括短文内容；2．坚持与成功的关系；3．举例；4．如何做到坚持下去．
重点短语：
get through（克服）in reality（事实上） be bound to（一定）  divide into（分为…）
高分句型：
1．Vivek had failed twelve times before he finally succeeded in gaining the admission into the Indian Navy Academy in his thirteenth attempt，which shows that perseverance and efforts can help get through all obstacles and pave the way to the final success．该句运用高级词汇及短语，并且运用非限制性定语从句，属于复杂长句．
2．In this hard struggle，some may submit to the difficulties，while others with strong willpower will persevere and my uncle is such an admirable person．
3．It is also advisable that we fulfill our dream by dividing it into small goals so that it may seem more accessible，which can help us persevere till the end．该句运用非限制性定语从句．

解答 Vivek had failed twelve times before he finally succeeded in gaining the admission into the Indian Navy Academy in his thirteenth attempt，which shows that perseverance and efforts can help get through all obstacles and pave the way to the final success．（高分句型1）（概括短文内容）
   In reality，no one can resist the sweet taste of success but success can hardly be achieved without perseverance．In this hard struggle，some may submit to the difficulties，while others with strong willpower will persevere and my uncle is such an admirable person．（高分句型2）（坚持与成功的关系）
   My uncle had to walk for an hour to the town to receive his middle school education．In the first year，he had ten peers．In junior three，however，he had to cover the long distance alone because the other nine fellows quitted school for the great hardships．But my uncle persevered and didn't stop his pursuit of ideal and now he is a successful engineer．（举例）
  We are bound to meet challenges on our life journey．But as long as we hold a dream that can greatly motivate us，we will move forward．It is also advisable that we fulfill our dream by dividing it into small goals so that it may seem more accessible，which can help us persevere till the end．（高分句型3）（坚持下去的方法）

点评 读写任务作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所给要点，写作时注意正确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词，句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．