Question

【题目】【2013年江西】母爱情深，母爱无价；学会感恩，学会回报。某英语网站举办以“My mother”为题的英语征文活动。请你根据下列思维导图提供的信息，写一篇短文，介绍自己的母亲和你们的真情故事。

提示：1.短文应包括导图中的全部信息，条理清楚，行文连贯，段落分明;

2.短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名。

3.词数不少于80，开头已给出:不计人总词数。

My mother

We need love. We also need to love. The person I love most is my mother.

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Answer 1

【答案】

My mother

We need love. We also need to love. The person I love most is my mother. My mother is 41 years old. She is of medium build with long black hair. Shi is quiet. She is a history teacher in a middle school. She likes dancing. She can cook delicious food.

She did a lot for me when I was a child. She bought whatever I needed for my study, even though she didn’t have much money. She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend. She cooked delicious and healthy food for me.

When I grow up, I will do what I can to make my mother happy. I will find a good job after I graduate from college. I’ll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young. I’ll take her to wonderful sights around China. Most importantly, I will stay with her when I have free time. That’s what she wants most, I think.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文，短文的开头已经给出.本作文中给出的要点比较简略,动笔前先要围绕这些要点阻止材料，确定写作内容，注意将这些要点全部表达出来，不要偏离文章中心.写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，一定要契合文章要表达的主题,不能出现文章脱节问题.尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

【亮点说明】该短文能够正确运用时态：介绍妈妈的一般情况用了一般现在时，介绍妈妈为自己所做的事情，用了过去时态，对将来要为妈妈做的事情，用了将来时。同时运用了大量的短语和复合句，如：定语从句The person I love most is my mother，及I’ll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young.状语从句She bought whatever I needed for my study, even though she didn’t have much money.时间状语从句When I grow up, I will do what I can to make my mother happy.，等，为文章增色。