Question

【题目】学校校刊正举行征文活动，主题为“我第一次参加的运动会”。根据中英文提示，写一篇意思连贯、符合逻辑、不少于50词的英语短文。内容要求：
1). 你参加了什么项目；
2). 成绩如何；
3). 有什么感受；

提示	1). What event did you take part in for the first time? 2). What was your result? 3). How did you feel?

提示词语： long jump, win, feel, nervous and excited, sorry

Answer 1

【答案】In Grade 4, I took part in the sports meet for the first time. My event was the relay race. I was running the last lap. It was the final event on sports meet. Everyone was nervous but excited. All the runners got ready at the starting line.

As soon as the race began, everyone was too excited to stop cheering. When it was my turn, I thought the Class 4's runner would catch up with me. So I tried my best to run faster though I was nervous. Finally, our class won the first prize in the most exciting event.

I was happy that we won the prize for my class. Of course, I was happy I was a part of them. This is my first time to take part in the sports meet and I think it's the most unforgettable sports meet in my school life.

【解析】这是一篇给材料作文，主题为“我第一次参加的运动会”。动笔前要先认真阅读要点，尽量将提示的内容利用上；以提示的问题作为写作的主线，结合材料内容，可知本文主要是第一人称，一般过去时态进行叙述。语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯。适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

写作亮点：本文紧扣材料，要点完整，表达清晰流畅。文中用到了很多短语，如：take part in ,as soon as, catch up with, try one's best to do等等。此外，句子之间用了一些连词，使逻辑更紧密，如but，and, Of course,,等。另外时态运用非常准确，语言准确，语意连贯，表达清楚，没有任何语法错误。