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8．寒假就要到了．很多学生打算在假期打工锻炼自己，可是有些家长不同意．他们认为打工既耽误学习，又不太安全．请你以"Should teenagers be allowed to have part-time jobs？"
为题写一篇80词左右的短文，谈谈你的看法．
Should teenagers be allowed to have part-time jobs？
Winter holiday is coming．Many students plan to have part-time jobs．But someparents disagree．They think it wastes the students'time and it isn't safe as well．
（高分句型一） In my opinion，teenagers should be allowed to do some part-time jobs．Firstly，they can experience different lives and get more knowledge outside school．（高分句型二）Meanwhile，after learning about the difficultyof making a living，they will cherish what they have now．What's more，teenagers should have chances to make decisions by themselves．
Of course，safety is the most important．Teenagers should learn to protect themselves when doing part-time jobs．．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：In my opinion，teenagers should be allowed to do some part-time jobs．依我看，青少年应该被允许做兼职．
be allowed to do sth．被允许做某事．
高分句型二：Meanwhile，after learning about the difficultyof making a living，they will cherish what they have now．与此同时，学习了关于谋生的艰难之后，他们将会珍惜他们现在所拥有的生活．
after…在…之后，引导的时间状语，主将从现．

解答 Should teenagers be allowedto have part-time jobs？
     Winter holiday is coming．Many students plan to have part-time jobs．But someparents disagree．They think it wastes the students'time and it isn't safe as well．（先提出一些人的看法）
  In my opinion，teenagers should be allowed to do some part-time jobs．（高分句型一）（提出自己的观点青少年应该被允许做兼职）Firstly，they can experience different lives and get more knowledge outside school．Meanwhile，after learning about the difficulty of making a living，they will cherish what they have now．（高分句型二）What's more，teenagers should have chances to make decisions by themselves．（后面几个句子支撑作者的观点）     Of course，safety is the most important．Teenagers should learn to protect themselves when doing part-time jobs．（总结，强调安全最重要，青少年做兼职的时候要学会保护自己）

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