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4．为了生活得更舒适、便捷，人类在不断开发利用资源，研发高科技产品．与此同时，我们的生存环境也会受到影响．为了建设资源节约型、环境友好型城市，青岛市政府提出了"Creatingbeautifulenvironment，buildingpleasanthomes"的理念．请以此为题，根据自己的亲身感受或所见所闻，用英语表达自己的看法．
写作要求：
1．参考图表中所给提示，任选两个方面，谈谈它们的利与弊．
2．作为中学生，应该怎么做？怎样带动家人、朋友及社区的人们，为建设我们美 好的家园而努力．写出至少2种具体做法．
3．词数80〜100．（标题和开头句不计入总词数）
Creating Beautiful Environment，Building Pleasant Homes
With the help of high technology，life is getting more and more comfortable and convenient．Most families have refrigerators，computers，mobile phones，cars and so on．We can eat kinds of fresh fruit and vegetables all year round．
However，at the same time，green land has become less and more pollution has been caused．
As students，we really need to do something，such as going to school on foot，by bicycle or by bus instead of by car．We should save water and energy at any time and anywhere．We could urge more people to recycle waste paper，bottles，batteries and many other things．
If everyone does a bit，our homes will become more pleasant and beautiful．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图表作文．内容是以"Creating beautiful environment，building pleasant homes"为题根据自己的亲身感受或所见所闻，用英语表达自己对建设资源节约型、环境友好型城市的看法．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．参考图表中所给提示，任选两个方面，谈谈它们的利与弊．
2．作为中学生，应该怎么做？怎样带动家人、朋友及社区的人们，为建设我们美好的家园而努力，写出至少2种具体做法．
常用到的重点短语：
all year round一年到头
cause pollution产生污染
at the same time同时
instead of而不是
need to do需要做某事
【高分句型】
1．As students，we really need to do something，①such as going to school on foot，by bicycle or by bus ②instead of by car．
①such as意为"例如，诸如此类的，像…那样的"，相当于like或for example．
②Instead of 是个短语介词．意思是"代替…"、"而不…"，后可以加上短语．
2．If everyone does a bit，our homes will become more pleasant and beautiful．
if引导的条件状语从句，遵循主将从现的规则．

解答 Creating Beautiful Environment，Building Pleasant Homes
With the help of high technology，life is getting more and more comfortable and convenient．Most families have refrigerators，computers，mobile phones，cars and so on．We can eat kinds of fresh fruit and vegetables all year round．（高科技给人们生活带来的好处）
However，at the same time，green land has become less and more pollution has been caused．（同时给环境带来的污染问题）
As students，we really need to do something，such as going to school on foot，by bicycle or by bus instead of by car．【高分句型】We should save water and energy at any time and anywhere．We could urge more people to recycle waste paper，bottles，batteries and many other things．（以身作则做的事情）
If everyone does a bit，our homes will become more pleasant and beautiful．【高分句型】（总结主题）

点评 本题是一篇图表作文，图表作为书面表达的一种信息提示方式，比提纲作文线索显得更简洁明了，写作时也容易区分表达，本题在写作时，要特别注意几种情况的描述，不能逐句翻译，同时要根据提示有效灵活的构思，恰当使用逻辑词语，让文章显得有条理，不杂乱．