Question

16．Write a passage of at least 60words about the topic"Encouragement brings me power．"（根
据所给情景，请以"鼓励带给我力量"为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格）．
（注意：短文中不得出现考生的名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分）．

Situation：In our daily life，we need lots of encouragement from our teachers，parents or friends．Please use one or two examples to show us your opinion on this topic and give your reason（s．．
（日常生活中我们需要来自多方的鼓励．请你举1-2个例子阐述你的观点，并说明理由）．

The following words and phrases are for your reference only．（下列词语仅供参考）

difficulties          deal with        disappointed achievements        manage        powerful

Life is full of difficulties and the best way to fight against them is to stick to them．But we can't always go through these problems ourselves，so we need to gain encouragement from others．
Once I made a speech in front of the students from different schools．I tried hard to say out every word clearly and correctly．Unfortunately，I was so nervous that I forgot one part of my speech．I felt disappointed and almost wanted to give up．"You are great．"Someone shouted．Others then started to cheer me up．I suddenly became powerful and completed the speech perfectly．
From that time，I have realized that we do need encouragement from teachers，parents or even straigers，because it will give us much power to achieve our dreams．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是以"Encouragement brings me power．"为题谈谈鼓励给我们带来的力量，时态主要为一般现在时和一般过去时．人称主要为第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1日常生活中我们需要来自多方的鼓励．
2一个事例
3感想
常用到的重点短语：
be full of 充满
stick to 坚持
try to do sth 尽力做某事
give up放弃
go through 经历
【高分句型】
1．①Unfortunately，I was ②so nervous that I forgot one part of my speech．
①Unfortunately不幸地，作为插入语．
②so…that如此…以致于…，引导的结果状语从句．
2．From that time，I have realized ①that we ②do need encouragement from teachers，parents or even straigers，③because it will give us much power ④to achieve our dreams．
①realize后接的是that引导的宾语从句．
②do在这里加强语气，表示确实、的确．
③because引导的原因状语从句．
④动词不定式作为目的状语．

解答 Life is full of difficulties and the best way to fight against them is to stick to them．But we can't always go through these problems ourselves，so we need to gain encouragement from others．（日常生活中我们需要来自多方的鼓励）
Once I made a speech in front of the students from different schools．I tried hard to say out every word clearly and correctly．Unfortunately，I was so nervous that I forgot one part of my speech．【高分句型】I felt disappointed and almost wanted to give up．"You are great．"Someone shouted．Others then started to cheer me up．I suddenly became powerful and completed the speech perfectly．（一个事例）
From that time，I have realized that we do need encouragement from teachers，parents or even straigers，because it will give us much power to achieve our dreams．【高分句型】（感想）

点评 以提纲提供情景的作文．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，文章必须覆盖所提供的各个提纲的要点．行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．