Question

【题目】昨天你和朋友去南通游玩。请根据以下提示写一篇短文，记录本次活动并简要谈谈感受。词数70左右，已给出首句，可适当发挥。

1到达：上午9点；

2活动：乘船游濠河(the Hao River)和狼山(the Wolf Hill)、游泳、骑马、踢球、吃午饭、唱歌、做游戏；

3返回：下午3：30。

Yesterday my friends and I went to Nantong.

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Answer 1

【答案】Yesterday my friends and I went to Nantong. When we arrived at nine, we first took a boat to visit the Hao River. We saw lots of beautiful birds there. After that, we also went swimming in the river. It was cool and comfortable. Then we came to the Wolf Hill. We rode horses and played football for about one hour. At about twelve o'clock, we had a simple lunch there. When lunch was over, we sang songs and played games. We started to go back at half past three. We had a wonderful time.

【解析】试题

这是一篇记叙文，需要记录下本次出行的活动，准确写出其中的各项活动。结合正确的时间表达法（at 9 o’clock in the morning等）描述动作，同时也要正确使用一般过去时，语言要连贯得体。

写作亮点：

首先要概括文章的主题（Yesterday my friends and I went to Nantong.）让读者知道这是一篇游记。一些细节处的词语可以增强文章的逻辑结构，如“first, After that, Then”等。行为动词的过去时使用准确，时间表达法准确。有适当的增添的细节，为文章内容进行了充实，如“had a simple lunch”（吃了一顿简便的午饭），“played football for about one hour”（踢了一个小时的足球）等，都丰富了题干要求的内容，在切题的基础上有亮点。