Question

3．今年我市深入开展了"学习雷锋精神，共创文明城区"的活动．在3月5日学雷锋纪念日这天，你校组织志愿者去诸暨敬老院开展"学雷锋，送温暖"活动．加入你是张华，请你发一封邮件将活动情况介绍给美国的朋友Ben，与他分享你的美好的经历．

活动时间	3月5日
活动地点	诸暨敬老院 （Zhuji Old People's Home）
参加人员	学校志愿者
活动形式	送去鲜花和水果；帮助打扫卫生；陪老人聊天、唱歌、跳舞；送去美好祝愿
活动感想	关爱老人（the elder people，尊重老人

要求：1．短文应包括表中所有要点，可适当发挥；
2．文章80个词左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear Ben，
Thank you for your last e-mail．Let me tell you what we did on March 5^th in our school．
                                                               
If you have the chance to come to China，I hope you can join us．
Yours，
Zhang Hua．

Answer 1

分析 【高分句型一】
As soon as we volunteer got to Zhuji Ola People's Home，they gave us a warm welcome我们志愿者一到诸暨敬老院，他们热烈欢迎了我们．
as soon as 一…就，引导的时间状语从句．
【高分句型二】
How happy we were!他们多么的开心！
how+adj+主语+谓语！感叹句的使用．

解答 Dear Ben，
   Thank you for your last e-mail．Let me tell you what we did on 5^th March in our school．（时间）
   As soon as we volunteer got to Zhuji Ola People's Home，they gave us a warm welcome【高分句型一】．（地点和参与人员）We brought some flowers and fruits to the elder people．We cleaned the windows and swept the floor for them．Then we sang and danced．How happy we were!【高分句型二】After that，we sat together chatting with them and gave our best wishes to them．The elder people were very excited．When it was time for us to leave，they were grateful for our kindness．（活动形式）But I felt it our duty to care for the elder people and respect them．（感想）
   If you have the chance to come to China，I hope you can join us．
 
                                                                 Yours，
                                                                 Zhang Hua

点评 写作要抓住要点．要在"准"字上下功夫．在写作中注意人称与谓语动词的数关系和动词时态等诸多方面．在平时的练习中，注意多背诵范文，对于写的好的句子要进行默写，这样在写作时就能写出准确地道的作文．