Question

7．为感受母爱情深，弘扬知恩图报，某英语网站正在举办以"My Mother"为主题的征文活动．请根据下列思维导图所提供的信息，写一篇短文，介绍你的母亲和你与母亲间的故事．

参考词汇：give much to…，It's my turn to…，try my best to…
提示：
1）短文内容须包括所给内容，含母亲曾为你所做的事和你将为母亲所做的事各一件，并阐述原因；
2）请注意短文结构层次、时态运用和卷面整洁度；
3）词数80个左右，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数；
4）文中不得出现学校和个人的相关信息．
My  Mother
We need love．We also need to show love．The person I love most is my
mother．The person I love most is my mother．My mother is 41 years old．She is of medium build with long black hair．Shi is quiet．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She likes dancing．She can cook delicious food．
She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．
When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what she wants most，I think．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是以"My mother"为题介绍自己的母亲和你们的真情故事．时态主要为一般现在时和一般过去时．人称主要为第一人称和第三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1介绍：年龄，工作，外貌，能力，爱好
2她为我做的事
3我将会为她做什么
常用到的重点短语：
even though即使
grow up 长大
make sb+adj使某人怎么样
like doing sth喜欢做某事
cook…for sb为某人做…
graduate from…从…毕业
【高分句型】
1．She bought ①whatever I needed for my study，②even though she didn't have much money．
①whatever无论什么．引导的宾语从句，作为buy的宾语．
②even though引导的让步状语从句．
2．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．
that make her look still young是一定语从句，修饰先行词clothes，关系词that作为定语从句的主语，不可省略．
3．①Most importantly，I will stay with her②when I have free time．
①Most importantly最重要的
②when引导的时间状语从句．

解答 My mother
We need love．We also need to love．The person I love most is my mother．The person I love most is my mother．My mother is 41 years old．She is of medium build with long black hair．Shi is quiet．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She likes dancing．She can cook delicious food．（介绍）
She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．【高分句型】She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．（她为我做的事）
When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．【高分句型】I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．【高分句型】That's what she wants most，I think．（我将会为她做什么）

点评 本题是一篇图表作文，图表作为书面表达的一种信息提示方式，比提纲作文线索显得更简洁明了，写作时也容易区分表达，本题是介绍自己的母亲，学生们有话可说，在写作时，要特别注意几种情况的描述，不能逐句翻译，同时要根据提示有效灵活的构思，恰当使用逻辑词语，让文章显得有条理，不杂乱．