题目内容
【题目】今年5月11日，你校组织了一次社会实践活动，部分学生选择去了红星农场（见导图一），其余学生选择去了科技博物馆（见导图二）。请根据你所选择的实践活动写一篇英语日记，记录当天的经历和感受。
导图一 导图二
注意：(1)日记必须包括你所选择导图的所有要点，并适当发挥；
(2)文中不得出现真实的人名和校名；
(3)词数：80 -100。日记格式及首句己给出，不计入总词数。
Friday, May 11th
Today I had a school trip.
【答案】Possible version 1:
Friday. May 11th
Today I had a school trip. The weather was fine. My classmates and I set off to Hongxing Farm by bus early in the morning.
The minute we arrived, we took a walk around the farm. Then we fed the chickens. When I threw some food to them, they ran over to me with excitement and some of them even walked into their friends. The most exciting thing was that we picked strawberries after lunch. While we were picking, we ate a lot. How sweet they were!
I had a wonderful time today! I do hope to go there again in the near future!
(98 words)
Possible version 2:
Friday, May 11th
Today I had a school trip. The weather was fine. My classmates and I set off to the Science Museum by subway at 7 :00.
As soon as we reached the museum, we were amazed to see lots of pictures about science. Then we watched a video about different inventions and their inventors. It's unbelievable that technology has progressed in such a rapid way. In the afternoon, we played chess with some special robots. It was surprising to find that nobody could beat them. Before leaving, we bought some gifts for our friends.
I had a wonderful time today! I do hope to go there again!
（99 words）
【解析】写作
首先要确定文章的体裁，这是一篇日记，这就决定了文章的人称。其次要看到要求是“根据你所选择的实践活动”进行写作，所以要在两个导图中挑选一个进行描述，不需要都写。在完全明白题目含义后就要根据导图中的要点（包括人物、交通方式、感受、活动）进行作文，使用恰当的语句进行连接、保证作文连贯得体即可。
写作亮点：
本文首先用首段点明了前往的地点，参与的实践活动的名称，补充介绍了天气。第二段介绍了在农场的活动，有相关细节的补充，如“took a walk around the farm”。对于“喂鸡”这一活动也进行了较为细致的描写“When I threw some food to them, they ran over to me with excitement and some of them even walked into their friends.”文章还重视简单句、并列句、复杂句的交替使用，还在第二段末尾运用了感叹句，使得文章句式变化多样。在最后一段通常可以表达自己的综合感受和对下次活动的期待，这样的文章就能够结构完整，细节丰富，连贯得体了。
