Question

【题目】请以“My best friend”为题，根据下列要点提示写一篇作文：
1)、Daniel, 13岁，阳光中学七年级一班。
2)、戴着眼镜，个子不高。今天他穿了一件白色的T-恤和一条蓝色的牛仔裤，看起来很干净。
3)、经常做运动，很少吃汉堡和喝可乐。
4)、对画画很感兴趣。没有很多时间玩电脑游戏。
5)、他家附近有一个购物中心，他经常周末在那里购物。他认为那是一个购物的好地方。
6)、最喜欢春节，家人团聚，享用美餐，非常幸福。
注意：1.词数100词左右。2.短文须包括所有要点内容，不要逐词翻译，可适当发挥，使短文连贯通顺。
My best friend

Answer 1

【答案】My best friend

My best friend is Daniel. He is 13 years old. He studies in Sunshine Middle School. He is in Class 1, Grade 7. He is short and wears glasses. He is wearing a white T-shirt and a pair of blue jeans today. He looks smart. He has a healthy lifestyle. He often exercises and he seldom has hamburgers and coke. He thinks they are bad for his health. He is interested in drawing. And he likes playing computer games too. As a student, he is busy with his study. So he doesn't have much time to play computer games. There is a shopping mall near his home. He often goes shopping there. And he thinks it's a good place to buy things.

【解析】这是一篇提纲作文。本文要求按照所给的题目结合提示内容完成这篇介绍好朋友的作文。写作中要包含介绍朋友的几个方面：姓名、年龄、就读学校班级和外貌、性格及爱好，今天的穿着等进行陈述，表达出朋友的与众不同的特点等。根据材料内容可知本文主要是一般现在时态，人称主要是第三人称，注意并列连词的使用及主谓一致问题。写作中注意上下文的过度，符合逻辑关系。

写作亮点：这篇短文全面、详尽地阐明了朋友的各项基本信息，并包含了文中所要求的全部内容。其中使用了一些固定句式和短语，包含形容词的准确使用为文章增色不少.如He looks smart. He has a healthy lifestyle.，are bad for，play computer games，go shopping，文中对于名词的使用准确恰当，如wearing a white T-shirt and a pair of blue jeans，have much time学习中再注意总结、牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理。