Question

【题目】书面表达

建设平安校园是我们每个人的责任与义务。作为一名学生，我们更应该珍惜自己的生命，更应该注意自己的人身安全。假如你是Daming ,并担任学生会主席，请你就安全问题，想全校学生发出倡议，写一封安全倡议书。

提示：1.不私自下河洗澡；2.不打架；3.上学放学的途中应该注意交通安全……

要求：1.可适当发挥，80词左右，开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数；

2.严禁出现自己的真实姓名和学校等相关信息。

Dear students,

As we know, safety is the most important thing in our lives. So, we should try our best to make us safe.

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Answer 1

【答案】

Dear students,

As we know, safety is the most important thing in our lives. So, we should try our best to make sure we are safe. We mustn't bring restricted knives or things to our school because these things may cause serious problems. Do not have a bath in rivers or ponds by ourselves without our parents permission. And, we should be friendly to others so fighting is strongly banned. Make sure that we should always pay attention to the traffic on our way to school or home. Furthermore, if we meet some emergency, we must call for help from the police or our teachers. In a word, following these safety rules above can make us live in peace.

Yours,

Daming

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇材料作文。所给材料比较详细，提示调理清晰，我们要做的就是用英语把这些内容表达出来。动笔前要认真审题，深入挖掘题材内涵，不可遗漏要点，并适当发挥。行文要注意人称的变化，时态的搭配以及主谓一致，同时注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

写作亮点：这篇短文涵盖了题目要求的所有要点内容，表达准确，意思连贯，符合逻辑。在文章的结构组织上注意使用多种句式，同时还使用了表示次序的连接词，文章脉络清晰，自然流畅。此外，一些常用短语如：be friendly to, make sure that…,pay attention to…,on one’s way to. call for help, in a word等短语的使用，使文章内容更为丰富。