Question

16．假如你叫李华，今年18岁，是光明中学的一名高二学生．你所在的城市明年要举办国际旅游节（tourism festival），现向全市招募志愿者，请你根据以下要点向组委会写一封申请信，应征旅游节志愿者的工作．
1、你的个人信息（年龄、性别、性格等）；
2、你的特殊优势（对地方旅游景点的了解，扎实的英语功底，相关的经历，沟通能力等）；
3、你的承诺．
注意：
1、词数100左右；
2、可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
3、信的开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear committee，
Thank you for taking your time to read my letter．I really hope to be a volunteer for the International Tourism Festival in our city．
I am Li Hua，an outgoing boy of 18 years old in Senior 2 of Guangming Middle School．I'm interested in travelling and have visited many places of interest．I have a good knowledge of our city's history，so I will be not only a servant but also a carrier of our splendid culture．（高分句型）What's more，English is my favourite and best subject．（高分句型）Last year I won the first prize in the oral English contest for high school students in our city．I think it easy for me to communicate well with the foreigners．Above all，I have experienced the 2010 Guangzhou Asian Games and I have been a successful stadium volunteer．（高分句型）
I'll be too glad to work for our city if I am given the opportunity．I'll be surely devoted to the job，making the foreigners more familiar with our city．（高分句型）
Looking forward to your early reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息Li Hua所在的城市明年要举办国际旅游节，现向全市招募志愿者，本文要求以周琦的身份写信给主委会，应征旅游节志愿者．所以本文使用第一人称和一般现在时为主的时态．考生可以根据自己的实际情况组织全文要点．文章要点如下：1、你的个人信息（年龄、性别、性格等）；
2、你的特殊优势（对地方旅游景点的了解，扎实的英语功底，相关的经历，沟通能力等）；
3、你的承诺．建议文章分成两部分，
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：
这篇范文很好地完成了要求的所有任务，包含了所有的要点，没有任何遗漏．另外范文中使用了较多的高级词汇，如have a good knowledge of掌握…、place of interest名胜古迹、be familiar with熟悉…；同时文章中的串联词使用的也很到位，如what's more，above all；文章中最后还使用了分词做状语的用法，如I'll be surely devoted to the job，making the foreigners more familiar with our city．这些技巧的运用让文章显得很有层次性．
I have a good knowledge of our city's history，so I will be not only a servant but also a carrier of our splendid culture．（高分句型）
What's more，English is my favourite and best subject．（高分句型）
Above all，I have experienced the 2010 Guangzhou Asian Games and I have been a successful stadium volunteer．（高分句型）
I'll be surely devoted to the job，making the foreigners more familiar with our city．（高分句型）

解答 Dear Committee，
      Thank you for taking your time to read my letter．I really hope to be a volunteer for the International Tourism Festival in our city．
      I am Li Hua，an outgoing boy of 18 years old in Senior 2 of Guangming Middle School．I'm interested in travelling and have visited many places of interest．I have a good knowledge of our city's history，so I will be not only a servant but also a carrier of our splendid culture．（高分句型）What's more，English is my favourite and best subject．（高分句型）Last year I won the first prize in the oral English contest for high school students in our city．I think it easy for me to communicate well with the foreigners．Above all，I have experienced the 2010 Guangzhou Asian Games and I have been a successful stadium volunteer．（高分句型）
       I'll be too glad to work for our city if I am given the opportunity．I'll be surely devoted to the job，making the foreigners more familiar with our city．（高分句型）
       Looking forward to your early reply．

                                                                                                                                                                                                      Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．