Question

13．前段时间，我校高一年段进行了职业生涯规划（career planning）设计比赛．每个人对于自己未来的职业都满怀憧憬．请你就你心目中的未来职业，以My job in the future为题写一篇简短的演讲稿．
注意：
（1）词数100左右； 演讲稿开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
（2）内容要点：
①你未来希望从事何种职业；
②你想从事这份工作的原因；
③你该如何实现从事这份工作的理想．
（3）可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
My job in the future
Good morning，everyone．
I often imagine what my job would be like after graduating from university．Unlike others，I prefer to be a farmer in the future．
It is well known that farming is the basic of a country，without which people would starve．（高分句型一）I hope the whole world would be rid of hunger．Besides，we can make use of what we have learned in school to improve our agriculture．（高分句型二）Thus our countryside will become more and more prosperous．
I will work hard to reach my future．I will exercise regularly to build up my body and work hard in my study to be well educated．Only with a strong body and rich knowledge can I become a good farmer．（高分句型三）

Thank you!

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息高一年段进行了职业生涯规划（career planning）设计比赛．每个人对于自己未来的职业都满怀憧憬．请你就你心目中的未来职业，以My job in the future为题写一篇简短的演讲稿，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：①你未来希望从事何种职业；②你想从事这份工作的原因；③你该如何实现从事这份工作的理想．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：prefer to更喜欢做；It is well known that …众所周知；be rid of 祛除，摆脱；Besides另外；Thus因此；build up my body强身健体；more and more prosperous越来越繁荣
It is well known that farming is the basic of a country，without which people would starve．（高分句型一）
Besides，we can make use of what we have learned in school to improve our agriculture．（高分句型二）
Only with a strong body and rich knowledge can I become a good farmer．（高分句型三）

解答 Good morning，everyone!
       I often imagine what my job will be like after graduating from university．Unlike others，I prefer to be a farmer in the future．
It is well known that farming is the basic of a country，without which people would starve．（高分句型一）I hope the whole world would be rid of hunger．Besides，we can make use of what we have learned in school to improve our agriculture．（高分句型二）Thus our countryside will become more and more prosperous．
       I will work hard to reach my future．I will exercise regularly to build up my body and work hard in my study to be well educated．Only with a strong body and rich knowledge can I become a good farmer．（高分句型三）
      Thank you!

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．