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2．最近，你们学校发起"阅读名人传记，增长人生智慧，成就理想人生"的活动，要求学生每人读一本名人传记．请你根据以下要求，写一篇发言稿来介绍你所了解的名人：
1．简单介绍该人物的主要生平和事迹；
2．你的想法和感悟，及如何去做．
注意：
1．词数：110词左右；
2．开头和结尾已经给出，但不计入总词数．
Good afternoon，everyone!
The book I read is about Marie Curie，the first woman scientist who won the Nobel Prize．（高分句型一）
Marie was born in Poland but she had to go to Paris for further study，where she began her scientific work．（高分句型二）Due to her devotion and dedication to science，she made a great discovery-radium，which contributed to the development of nuclear power and medical treatment．（高分句型三）However，she asked nothing for what she had done and made sure that radium should be used to benefit the human race．（该人物的主要生平和事迹）
When reading her story，I was moved to tears several times．I admired her so much that I made up my mind to work hard and become a scientist．I think I need to improve my studies and prepare for my future career．（想法和感悟）
Thanks for listening!
Thanks for listening!

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息最近，你们学校发起"阅读名人传记，增长人生智慧，成就理想人生"的活动，要求学生每人读一本名人传记．请你根据以下要求，写一篇发言稿来介绍你所了解的名人，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：简单介绍该人物的主要生平和事迹；你的想法和感悟，及如何去做．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：Due to 幸亏，由于；contribute to 有助于；However然而；make up my mind to  do下定决心去做某事；prepare for为…做准备；
The book I read is about Marie Curie，the first woman scientist who won the Nobel Prize．（高分句型一）
Marie was born in Poland but she had to go to Paris for further study，where she began her scientific work．（高分句型二）
Due to her devotion and dedication to science，she made a great discovery-radium，which contributed to the development of nuclear power and medical treatment．（高分句型三）

解答 Good afternoon，everyone!
       The book I read is about Marie Curie，the first woman scientist who won the Nobel Prize．（高分句型一）
       Marie was born in Poland but she had to go to Paris for further study，where she began her scientific work．（高分句型二）Due to her devotion and dedication to science，she made a great discovery-radium，which contributed to the development of nuclear power and medical treatment．（高分句型三）However，she asked nothing for what she had done and made sure that radium should be used to benefit the human race．（该人物的主要生平和事迹）
      When reading her story，I was moved to tears several times．I admired her so much that I made up my mind to work hard and become a scientist．I think I need to improve my studies and prepare for my future career．（想法和感悟）
      Thanks for listening!

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．