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4．每年三月是植树活动月，假定你是李华，你们班开展了一次植树活动，请你根据以下要点，写一篇日记，记叙这次植树活动．
1）活动目的：亲近自然，绿化环境
2）活动时间：2017年3月12日
3）活动地点：西山（距你校5公里）
4）具体活动过程
5）活动感受
注意：1．运用日记的正确形式
2．字数100 左右
3．可适当增加细节，使行文流畅．
March 12，2017 Sunny
Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment．（高分句型一）In the morning，we took a bus to Western hill which is 5 kilometers away from our school．On arrival，we began to work immediately．Some were digging holes．Some were carrying and planting young trees．Others were watering them．After getting the work done，we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees．（高分句型二）Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action．
Seeing the lines of trees，we all had a sense of achievement．（高分句型三）We feel it's our duty to protect our environment．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息每年三月是植树活动月，假定你是李华，你们班开展了一次植树活动，请你根据以下要点，写一篇日记，记叙这次植树活动，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：1）活动目的：亲近自然，绿化环境；2）活动时间：2017年3月12日；3）活动地点：西山（距你校5公里）；4）具体活动过程；5）活动感受2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：aim to目的是；get close to靠近，接近；put up 竖起，张贴；a sense of achievement成就感；
Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment．（高分句型一）
Others were watering them．After getting the work done，we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees．（高分句型二）
Seeing the lines of trees，we all had a sense of achievement．（高分句型三）

解答 March 12，2017                                                 Sunny
      Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment．（高分句型一）In the morning，we took a bus to Western hill which is 5 kilometers away from our school．On arrival，we began to work immediately．Some were digging holes．Some were carrying and planting young trees．Others were watering them．After getting the work done，we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees．（高分句型二）Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action．
      Seeing the lines of trees，we all had a sense of achievement．（高分句型三）We feel it's our duty to protect our environment．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．