题目内容
【题目】假如你是李华,即将参加高考,结束自己的高中生活。你想写一封电子邮件给一位你高中时期最尊敬的老师,对他或者她这几年来的关心和帮助表示感谢。
内容要求:
1. 他或者她最让你感动的一件事情
2. 你的感想
3. 对老师表示祝福
注意:
1. 不少于120词;
2. 不得透露与考生相关的姓名、学校名称以及地区名称等;
3. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯,表达顺畅。
Dear Mr./Ms. Wang,
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【答案】
Dear Mr./Ms Wang,
How time flies! I clearly remember the moment when I just stepped into high school. Now I am going to participate in the national college entrance examination and say goodbye to my high school life. Here I want to say you are one of my best-loved teachers for helping me with my study and caring about my life.
There was a time when I got a really low score in an examination. On seeing the results, I could not help burying my head on the desk and weeping. But you were so insightful to observe my sadness and depression that I tried hard to hide. To my surprise, you let me follow you to your office after class and then told me that victory and defeat were both common in life. It’s your words that rebuilt my confidence and courage. So here I really thank you for all you have done for me during my stay in high school and will never forget the days I spent with you.
I sincerely hope you can take good care of yourself instead of being too dedicated to ignore your health. Wish you happiness and fitness.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【解析】
试题分析:本文是提纲类作文,要点已给出,写作时可适当增加细节以使行文连贯,同时要把所提示的点写全,语句通顺,同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系。根据句意适当使用并列连词,同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩。
【亮点说明】本文是一篇电子邮件,采用三段式,内容齐全,结构严谨,布局合理,运用高级句子。I clearly remember the moment when I just stepped into high school. When引导定语从句;But you were so insightful to observe my sadness and depression that I tried hard to hide.句中使用结果状语从句;after class and then told me that victory and defeat were both common in life. That引导宾语从句;It’s your words that rebuilt my confidence and courage.强调句式堪称经典;另外,On seeing the results, To my surprise, Wish you happiness and fitness.的运用为文章增色添彩。