Question

5．假定你是学校志愿者团队的学生李华，为维护城市自然环境，五月六日你们班到中山公园参加了环保志愿者活动．请你用日记的形式记叙此事．
内容包括：1．活动内容：捡拾垃圾，分发传单…
2．你对本次活动的感想．
注意：1．词数100左右；
2．日记的开头已为你拟好，不计入总词数．
提示词：传单leaflets
May 6th Saturday Fine．
Today we took part in a meaningful activity organized by the Voluntary Service Club of our school in order to protect the natural environment of the city．（高分句型一）In the morning，we went to Zhongshan Park by bus，talking and laughing all the way．Upon our arrival，we began to work in no time．Some were picking up rubbish while others were collecting the cigarette ends and bottles to throw them into the dustbins．（高分句型二）After getting the work done，some of us distributed leaflets to raise the public's awareness of the damage littering can cause．
We have learned much from the voluntary experience，which offers us an opportunity to contribute to society better．（高分句型三）With the joint efforts，our city will become a more enjoyable place in the near future．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假定你是学校志愿者团队的学生李华，为维护城市自然环境，五月六日你们班到中山公园参加了环保志愿者活动．请你用日记的形式记叙此事，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：活动内容：捡拾垃圾，分发传单…；你对本次活动的感想．
 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般过去时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：take part in参加；in order to以便，为了；in no time立即，马上；pick up捡；contribute to 贡献；
Today we took part in a meaningful activity organized by the Voluntary Service Club of our school in order to protect the natural environment of the city．（高分句型一）
Some were picking up rubbish while others were collecting the cigarette ends and bottles to throw them into the dustbins．（高分句型二）
We have learned much from the voluntary experience，which offers us an opportunity to contribute to society better．（高分句型三）

解答 May 6th Saturday                                                         Fine
      Today we took part in a meaningful activity organized by the Voluntary Service Club of our school in order to protect the natural environment of the city．（高分句型一）In the morning，we went to Zhongshan Park by bus，talking and laughing all the way．Upon our arrival，we began to work in no time．Some were picking up rubbish while others were collecting the cigarette ends and bottles to throw them into the dustbins．（高分句型二）After getting the work done，some of us distributed leaflets to raise the public's awareness of the damage littering can cause．
     We have learned much from the voluntary experience，which offers us an opportunity to contribute to society better．（高分句型三）With the joint efforts，our city will become a more enjoyable place in the near future．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．