题目内容
【题目】加拿大及教师史密斯(Smith)教授在你校任教英语一年了。现在他即将离任回国。假如你是你校学生会主席,你代表全体同学致欢送辞,对史密斯教授的工作表示感谢,并预祝它旅途愉快。
Dear Professor Smith, boys and girls,
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【答案】Dear Professor Smith, boys and girls,
Professor Smith is leaving us for his home country. Now we gather here to say goodbye to him, and express our gratitude to him as well.
In the past year, Professor Smith has made great contributions to the improvement of English teaching quality of our school. He has brought to us not only advanced teaching methods, but also new ideas of teaching and learning. Our English has improved a great deal as a result of Professor Smith’s efforts. Thanks to his help, both our written English and oral English have greatly improved. We feel sorry that we have to say good-bye now but I’m sure we will remember each other in the days to come.
Now please allow me to express our sincere thanks once again to him on behalf of all the students and teachers of our school and wish him a pleasant safe journey home.
【解析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求以学生会主席的身份写一篇欢送辞对即将离任回国的斯密史教授的工作表示感谢并预祝他旅途愉快。
第一步:审题
体裁:应用文。
时态:根据提示,时态应为一般现在时。
结构:总分法。
要求:
1.对史密斯教授的工作表示感谢。
2.预祝它旅途愉快。
第二步:列提纲(重点短语)
say goodbye to; made great contributions; as a result of ;feel sorry that
第三步:连词成句
1.Now we gather here to say goodbye to him, and express our gratitude to him as well.
2.In the past year, Professor Smith has made great contributions to the improvement of English teaching quality of our school.
3.Our English has improved a great deal as a result of Professor Smith’s efforts.
4.We feel sorry that we have to say good-bye now but I’m sure we will remember each other in the days to come.
根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步:连句成篇
1.表示文章结构顺序:对斯密史的工作表示感谢;预祝旅途愉快。
2. 表示并列补充关系:not only…but also; as a result of; Thanks to
第五步:润色修改
范文内容完整,要点全面,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当,上下文意思连贯。复合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多的高端句式,如宾语从句:We feel sorry that we have to say good-bye now but I’m sure we will remember each other in the days to come;同时使用了很多的高级词或短语如:express our gratitude;made great contributions;as a result of;allow me to;on behalf of;a pleasant safe journey home…等。文章思路清晰,层次分明,上下句转换自然。为文章增色添彩。