题目内容
10.假定你是贵州省思南中学高二年级的一名学生Zhangjun,请你用英语给校长写一封信,谈谈你对在校学生使用智能手机的情况.信的内容包括以下几点:1.使用智能手机对学生学习产生的好处.
2.使用智能对学生产生的负面影响.
3.提出自己的建议并简要说明理由.
注意:注意:1.短文需涵盖表格中所述要点,可以进行适当的拓展;
2.词数:120词左右.
Dear Sir,
My name is Zhangjun.I am writing to show my concern about the effects of smart mobilephones on us students.
Yours
Zhangjun
分析 本篇书面表达属于英文书信,根据提示信息说明本校学生使用智能手机的情况.写作时注意以下几点:1、仔细阅读有关提示,弄清试题提供的所有信息,明确三个要点:使用智能手机对学生学习产生的好处和产生的负面影响以及自己对此事的看法.2、提纲是文章的总体框架,要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象.要依据提示情景或词语,按照一定逻辑关系来写.本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写.3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态;就本文而言应该用一般现在时态.4.注意使用高级词汇和句式,以增加文章的亮点.
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑,层次分明,而且使用了多种句式和结构.比如the view that possessing a smart mobilephone is a fashion 和There is no doubt that…运用了同位语从句,以及which 和where引导的定语从句.此外,文章还使用了大量习语和短语,如each coin has two sides,in other words,focus our attention on,take…into consideration等.插入语what's worse,以及副词However的使用使文章内容更具有层次感,也使语言更加连贯.
解答 Dear Sir,
My name is Zhangjun.I am writing to show my concern about the effects of smart mobilephones on us students.
Nowadays,smart mobilephones are very popular in our school.Many students hold the view that possessing an smart mobilephone is a fashion.There is no doubt that with it we can listen to music,download learning materials,and so on.(高分句型)In other words,it's helpful to our studies,especially our English learning.
However,each coin has two sides.Some students bring their smart mobilephones to the classroom and listen to music,which ruins our learning atmosphere.(高分句型)What's worse,some even waste their precious time playing games.
In my opinion,school is a place where we should focus our attention on lessons,so smart mobilephones should be banned in classroom.(高分句型)I hope you will take my suggestions into consideration.
I am looking forward to your early reply.
Yours,
Li_Hua
点评 应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯,比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词,使文章流畅、通顺,并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感.(1)认真审题,确定体裁. (2)构思要点.根据题目要求,理解要表达的要点.设计好文章的层次段落,考虑所用时态、人称等,把要点串联起来,构成文章框架.(3)选词造句,避难选易.(4)认真检查,避免错误.仔细阅读全文,查找是否有错,注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误,句式是否正确.逻辑是否一致.