Question

9．假如你是李明，暑假期间你去某城市旅游住在一家酒店．你对酒店的服务不太满意，因此给酒店的外国经理Robert写了一封投诉信．
（1）饭菜价格比同类酒店高很多；
（2）承诺24小时供应热水，但经常在晚上10点后就停止供水了；
（3）客房里的电视有问题，打了几次电话都没人来修理；
（4）客房不整洁，服务员打扫不及时．
注意：1．词数100左右． 2．内容可适当发挥，注意行文连贯．
Dear Robert，
I'm one of your customers．I'm writing to tell you that there are a few aspects that are not quite satisfactory in your hotel．（高分句型一）
To begin with，the prices of the food in your hotel are much higher than those of other hotels．Therefore，most of the ordinary people can't afford it．Secondly，you have promised to provide hot water 24 hours a day，but it often happens that there is no hot water after 10 p．m．（高分句型二）What's more，the picture on the TV set in my room was not clear，but nobody came to repair it although I phoned several times．（高分句型三）Finally，the room was not clean enough，and the service people didn't clean it in time．
I hope you can take necessary measures to improve the present situation．
Yours，
Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息暑假期间你去某城市旅游住在一家酒店．你对酒店的服务不太满意，因此给酒店的外国经理Robert写了一封投诉信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：（1）饭菜价格比同类酒店高很多；（2）承诺24小时供应热水，但经常在晚上10点后就停止供水了；（3）客房里的电视有问题，打了几次电话都没人来修理；（4）客房不整洁，服务员打扫不及时．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：To begin with首先；Therefore因此；Secondly其次；What's more而且；Finally最后；in time及时；take necessary measures to采取必要措施；
I'm writing to tell you that there are a few aspects that are not quite satisfactor y in your hotel．（高分句型一）
Secondly，you have promised to provide hot water 24 hours a day，but it often happens that there is no hot water after 10 p．m．（高分句型二）
What's more，the picture on the TV set in my room was not clear，but nobody came to repair it although I phoned several times．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Robert，
     I'm one of your customers．I'm writing to tell you that there are a few aspects that are not quite satisfactory in your hotel．（高分句型一）
     To begin with，the prices of the food in your hotel are much higher than those of other hotels．Therefore，most of the ordinary people can't afford it．Secondly，you have promised to provide hot water 24 hours a day，but it often happens that there is no hot water after 10 p．m．（高分句型二）What's more，the picture on the TV set in my room was not clear，but nobody came to repair it although I phoned several times．（高分句型三）Finally，the room was not clean enough，and the service people didn't clean it in time．
     I hope you can take necessary measures to improve the present situation．
                                                                                                                                                                                                   Yours，
Li Ming．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．