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18．Eating snacks can be a good way to stop your hunger and get the vitamins your body needs．But as teenagers you need to pay attention to what you eat．Choosing healthy snacks means shopping smartly．Be careful of the health claims on food packages．Words on the package like"all natural"or"pure"don't always mean the food is good for you．Be careful of low-fat food claims，too．If the fat has been cut back，the amount of sugar in the food may have been increased to keep the food tasting good．Many low-fat foods have nearly as many calories as their full-fat versions．Here are some ways to make healthy snacking part of your everyday routine．
★Keep plenty of fresh fruit and vegetables at home，so you can take them with you when you go out．
★Satisfy your cravings with healthier foods．If you are crazy about chocolate，try a hot chocolate drink instead of a chocolate bar．If you want something salty，eat whole grain biscuits instead of potato chips．Besides，it is wise for you to replace ice-cream with yogurt．
★Pay attention to the amount you eat．As with everything，moderation（适度）is the key to smart snacking．
【写作内容】
1．用约30个单词概述上述信息的主要内容；
2．简述摄取过多脂肪和热量的负面影响；
3．你对"零食控"的建议．
【写作要求】
1．写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句；
2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；
3．不必写标题．
【评分标准】
内容完整，语音规范，语篇连贯，词数适当．
参考词汇：肥胖   obesity
The passage informs teenagers of the necessity to choose healthy and moderate snacks，which is beneficial to their health，as well as some ways to make healthy snacks part of their daily life．（高分句型一）
As we know，some snacks are high in fat or sugar．Taking too much fat can result in obesity．To much fat in a human body is likely to cause various diseases，including high blood pressure，high blood sugar and heart disease．（高分句型二）Worse still，teenagers who are troubled by weight problems may also lack confidence in communicating with others，which can result in psychological problems．（高分句型三）Thus，I suggest that those who are crazy aboutsnacks should eat snacks when it is necessary．For example，when they feel hungry after taking exercise，they can have some healthysnacks，such as fresh fruit and yogurt．These foods can add the calories or nutrients they need and are low in fat．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于读写任务作文，根据提示信息简述摄取过多脂肪和热量的负面影响及对"零食控"的建议，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，2、要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照一定的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：is beneficial to对…有益；as well as 除…之外，也；As we know众所周知；Worse still更糟的是；result in导致
The passage informs teenagers of the necessity to choose healthy and moderate snacks，which is beneficial to their health，as well as some ways to make healthy snacks part of their daily life．（高分句型一）
To much fat in a human body is likely to cause various diseases，including high blood pressure，high blood sugar and heart disease．（高分句型二）
Worse still，teenagers who are troubled by weight problems may also lack confidence in communicating with others，which can result in psychological problems．（高分句型三）

解答 The passage informs teenagers of the necessity to choose healthy and moderate snacks，which is beneficial to their health，as well as some ways to make healthy snacks part of their daily life．（高分句型一）
      As we know，some snacks are high in fat or sugar．Taking too much fat can result in obesity．To much fat in a human body is likely to cause various diseases，including high blood pressure，high blood sugar and heart disease．（高分句型二）Worse still，teenagers who are troubled by weight problems may also lack confidence in communicating with others，which can result in psychological problems．（高分句型三）Thus，I suggest that those who are crazy about snacks should eat snacks when it is necessary．For example，when they feel hungry after taking exercise，they can have some healthy snacks，such as fresh fruit and yogurt．These foods can add the calories or nutrients they need and are low in fat．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．