Question

13．你的英国朋友Jim所在的学校要组织学生来中国旅行，有两条线路可以选择："长江之行"或者"泰山之旅"．Jim来信希望你能给些建议．请你给他回信，内容包括：
1．你建议的线路；
2．你的理由；
3．你的祝愿．
注意：
1．词数不少于50；
2．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear Jim，
I am glad to learn that you are coming to visit China．
Of the two routes given by your school，I strongly recommend that the trip to the Yangtze River deserve the effort．For one thing，you can experience rich Chinese culture along the river，which has been handed down from generation to generation； For another，the river，extending as long as 6300 kilometres，runs through different parts of China．As a result，it can provides splendid landscape of different kinds．
I believe that the trip，both relaxing and rewarding，is bound to be a memorable experience for you．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型：
句型一：
Of the two routes given by your school，I strongly recommend that（1）the trip to the Changjiang River deserve the effort（2）．你们学校所提供的两个路线中，我强烈建议长江之行值得付出努力．
（1）recommend vt．推荐，建议，后接宾语从句，从句中动词用"（should）+动词原形"，为虚拟语气的用法，是书面表达的亮点句型．
（2）deserve vt．值得；deserve the effort值得付出努力．
句型二：
For one thing（1），you can experience rich Chinese culture along the river，which （2）has been handed down from generation to generation（3）； 一则，你能够体验长江沿途的中国文化，它是代代相传下来的文化．
（1）For one thing…for another一则…再则…；关联词，使得文章流畅；
（2）which 引导的非限制性定语从句；which指代上文的Chinese culture；非限制性定语从句是书面表达中的常见的高级句型．
（3）hand down…from generation to generation代代相传；短语是书面表达中的常见高级词汇．
句型三：
I believe that the trip，both relaxing and rewarding（1），is bound to （2）be a memorable experience for you．我相信，这个旅行，既放松又值得；肯定会成为你的一次难忘的经历．
（1）both relaxing and rewarding既放松又值得，现在分词短语做trip的非限制性定语；分词做定语或状语一直是书面表达中被推崇的高分句型．
（2）be bound to do 必然会…

解答 Dear Jim，
       I am glad to learn that you are coming to visit China（表示欢迎）．
       Of the two routes given by your school，I strongly recommend that the trip to the Changjiang River deserve the effort【高分句型一】（建议的线路）．For one thing，you can experience rich Chinese culture along the river，which has been handed down from generation to generation【高分句型二】； For another，the river，extending as long as 6300 kilometres，runs through different parts of China．As a result，it can provides splendid landscape of different kinds（选择该线的理由）．
       I believe that the trip，both relaxing and rewarding，is bound to be a memorable experience for you【高分句型三】（祝愿）．
Yours，
 Li Hua

点评 写作时首先审题，本题体裁为建议信，属于常规复习内容．选择其中一条线路，围绕中国传统文化的主线去写就基本能扣题，稍微需要注意题干要点之间的界限，确保要点齐全．其次要考虑高分词语和句型的选用，从句、非谓语动词、倒装、强调句型等都是可考虑的高级句型；词语和句型的选用要包含作者的感情色彩和增强表达的气势；再次，运用关联词如besides、what's  more、moreover、for one thing …for another等，使文字更加流畅．