Question

12．假如你是李华，你校外教Peter合约到期，你向他推荐可带回国的有中国特色的小物件，请给他写一封电子邮件．内容包括：
1．推荐两个物件并描述其特征；
2．陈述推荐理由．
注意：1．词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．格式已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear Peter，
                  ．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，给外教Peter写一封电子邮件．向他推荐可带回国的有中国特色的小物件．
写作时人称以第一和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主．
写作要点：1．推荐两个物件并描述其特征； 2．陈述推荐理由．
重要短语：go back to（回到…），be typical of（典型的），take sth with sb（随身携带…），come into one's mind （映入脑海），be made of（由…制成），be designed into diverse shapes （被设计成不同形状），adorable images （可爱的图画），a popular form of entertainment（一种受欢迎的娱乐形式），recall the unforgettable experience（回忆难忘的经历）．
【高分句型一】
1．Hearing that you're going back to your country，I think it's a good idea to choose some items typical of Chinese culture to take with you．
此处是由现在分词+宾语从句"Hearing that"作时间状语，主句为"I think it's a good idea to choose some items typical of Chinese culture to take with you"，主句的主语为"I"与所给动词"hear"构成逻辑上的主动关系．
【高分句型二】
2．The first item coming into my mind is the Chinese kite，the cultural symbol of my hometown．
此处为 现在分词短语"coming into my mind"作名词"item"的后置定语，可以理解为"The first item which comes into mind is the Chinese kite，the cultural symbol of my hometown"．
【高分句型三】
3．Kites，mostly made of paper，are often designed into diverse shapes，some with adorable animal images like butterflies or eagles．
此处是由过去分词短语"made of paper"作名词"Kites"的后置定语，可以理解为"Kites which are made of paper，are often designed into diverse shapes，some with adorable animal images like butterflies or eagles"．
【高分句型四】
4．People can fly kites in an open area，which is a popular form of entertainment．
此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，关系代词"which"在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容．

解答 Dear Peter，
Hearing that you're going back to your country，I think it's a good idea to choose some items typical of Chinese culture to take with you．【高分句型一】
The first item coming into my mind is the Chinese kite，the cultural symbol of my hometown．【高分句型二】（推荐第一个物件） Kites，mostly made of paper，are often designed into diverse shapes，some with adorable animal images like butterflies or eagles．【高分句型三】（第一个物件特征） People can fly kites in an open area，which is a popular form of entertainment．【高分句型四】（推荐第一个物件理由） Besides，a pen container with the Chinese ink painting on it is also a nice choice．（推荐第二个物件及特征） I'm sure each time you use it，you will recall the unforgettable experience in China．（推荐第二个物件理由）
I hope my advice can be helpful to you．Looking forward to your good news．
Yours，
Li Hua

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．