Question

【题目】假如你是佳木斯第一中学高二学年的学生李华，在网上看到了本市儿童福利院招募志愿者的广告，要求周日工作半天，工作内容包括看护幼童，教小学生文化课等等。你非常感兴趣，请写一封应征信，写明自己想参加的意愿、原因、个人能力等。

要求：

1.100词左右；可适当发挥。

2.参考词汇：儿童福利院Children Welfare House

3.开头结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Madame or Sir,

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Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Madame or Sir,

I am writing in response to the position as a volunteer advertised on the Internet,and I hope I can have the opportunity to be admitted.

I'm a second grader from Jiamusi No.1 High School,hardworking and outgoing.Not heavily burdened by schoolwork,I can guarantee the working time on Sundays.Since I was very young,I have been very interested in teaching,especially teaching small kids.Besides studying with them,having fun with them is a great pleasure for me.I have done similar work before so I think I can handle it very easily.I am confident that your children will love me.

It will be appreciated if I can volunteer in Welfare House.

Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】试题分析：本文属于提纲类写作。高二学年的学生李华，在网上看到了本市儿童福利院招募志愿者的广告，要求周日工作半天，工作内容包括看护幼童，教小学生文化课等等。写作的要点主要有：简单自我介绍，写明自己想参加的意愿、原因、个人能力等。写作时不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯同时要把所提示的点写全，语句通顺，同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩。

【本文亮点】

本篇范文很好地进行了语篇设计，全文分成几段显得很有条理；各要点的叙述井井有条，层次分明。文章开头点明写信意图，言简意赅。第二段为重点展开要点的段落。作者在文章中多次使用了复合句和非谓语动词形式作状语、宾语、主语等，如Not heavily burdened by...., Since I was very young,....；Besides studying .... having fun with them…等；同时句中的高级词汇和句型使用合理，如guarantee，It will be appreciated if I…等；语言地道，没有堆砌辞藻，没有出现中国式英语的句型。另外文章中的连接词运用较好，如第二段中Besides, especially等等。