Question

10．假设你是红星中学高三（1）班学生李华，班里一名高一高二时一直学习很优秀的学生王毅，在进入高三时考试成绩不佳，感到很苦恼．请根据下列要点用英语给他写封信：
1．帮他分析原因
2．给他提出建议
3．陈述你帮助他的具体打算
注意：词数100左右．开头、结尾已经给出，不计入总字数．
Dear Wang Yi，
I'm sorry to learn your present condition．
In my memory，you were excellent in Senior 1 and Senior 2．However，when you enter Senior 3，you haven't got good marks．In my opinion，something must be wrong with your method of studies．In addition，you are experiencing too much pressure，which does great harm to you．（高分句型一）Therefore，you should change a bit．First，you should follow the teachers，and understand all they have taught in class．Second，you should make your own plan，and improve yourself bit by bit．Third，you should learn to relax．For example，you can walk，chat after class，or play table tennis sometimes．If you are willing to talk to me，you can call me or send me an email．（高分句型二） Hope you will get used to the new life and have your grades improved soon．（高分句型三）
Best regards．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假设你是红星中学高三（1）班学生李华，班里一名高一高二时一直学习很优秀的学生王毅，在进入高三时考试成绩不佳，感到很苦恼．请根据下列要点用英语给他写封信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：帮他分析原因；给他提出建议；陈述你帮助他的具体打算2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：In my memory在我的记忆中；However然而；In my opinion，以我的观点来看；In addition另外；do great harm to 对…有害；Therefore因此；get used to适应；
In addition，you are experiencing too much pressure，which does great harm to you．（高分句型一）
If you are willing to talk to me，you can call me or send me an email．（高分句型二）
Hope you will get used to the new life and have your grades improved soon．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Wang Yi，
       I'm  sorry to learn your present condition．In my memory，you were excellent in Senior 1 and Senior 2．However，when you enter Senior 3，you haven't got good marks．In my opinion，something must be wrong with your method of studies．In addition，you are experiencing too much pressure，which does great harm to you．（高分句型一）Therefore，you should change a bit．First，you should follow the teachers，and understand all they have taught in class．Second，you should make your own plan，and improve yourself bit by bit．Third，you should learn to relax．For example，you can walk，chat after class，or play table tennis sometimes．If you are willing to talk to me，you can call me or send me an email．（高分句型二）
       Hope you will get used to the new life and have your grades improved soon．（高分句型三）
       Best regards．
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．