Question

【题目】An ant，going to a river to drink，fell in，and was carried along in the stream．“Help! Help!” A dove(鸽子)heard the cry and threw a small branch into the river．With the help of the branch，the ant finally reached the shore．A while later，the ant saw a man take aim at the dove with an arrow．The ant stung(刺)the man sharply on his foot，causing him to miss the dove and so saved the dove’s life．

内容要求：

1．这则寓言的寓意；

2．你相关的经历；

3．恰当的结尾。

注意：

1．短文开头已给出，不计人总

2．文中不能出现考生的具体信息；

3．词数：120左右

The fable tells us that

Answer 1

【答案】

The fable tells us that one good turn deserves another,which means you should help someone who has helped you

My tuition is totally free all the time because of my parents’ low incomes.A few years ago,while I was still in my junior high school,my father was seriously ill and had to go to hospital for his operation,which further worsened our already situation.My deskmate Li Qiang,having know all this,asked his parents without delay to help us pay hospital fees,by which I was touched,strongly feeling the love from them.With the entrance examination drawing near, after Li Qiang started falling behind with his English.I offered to help him with it.Happily,we were both admitted to the same key senior high school.

Actually being helped is blessing.Whenever I have the ability to help others.I should always lend a hand.

【解析】

试题分析：该作文是给材料作文。根据寓言写一篇文章，首先要看懂寓言说的是什么，然后围绕中心意思结合自己的经历进行写作。文章主题注意条理要清晰，逻辑顺序和结构要恰当，同时要尽量保持简洁精干的内容，不拖泥带水。要注意题中所给的信息，不可偏题，应用文写作对于文章内容的要求是要达到写作目的。尽量保持卷面整洁，字体美观，注意行文的连贯性。使用一些高级句型和词汇提升作文档次。【亮点说明】文章第一段写明寓言的中心意思，以便文章的展开。范文使用了一个非限制性定语从句来解释寓言的具体含义。第二段开始展开自己的事情，第二句使用了一个时间状语从句和非限制性定语从句。while I was still in my junior high school,my father was seriously ill and had to go to hospital for his operation,which further worsened our already situation.当我还在初中的时候，我的父亲病重不得不住院进行手术，这使得我们目前的（经济）情况更加糟糕。第三句使用了一个非限制性定语从句by which I was touched,我因此被感动了。并且有分词结构做状语having know all this在知道了这一切之后。第四句开头使用了with的复合结构表示伴随状态。第三段进行总结，第二句使用了一个让步状语从句Whenever I have the ability to help others，I should always lend a hand.不论何时我有能力去帮助他人的时候，我总会伸出援手。范文结构清晰，完成了题中所给的要求，并且使用了大量的从句和分词结构，是一篇不错的范文。